Thaankyoouu soo muuuchh ^^!!
Thanks for letting me know hahaha
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The Duchess' Play Time
Fantasy · LittolSol
Thank you so much ^^ I'll keep working hard!!
I could see the work you put into this novel ( he fact that you posted 4 chapters in one day) and I can also see that it also needs improvements. There are visible wrong grammar and punctuations and the character design is a tad bit confusing. Other than that, the story is good, the world and her origins is a mystery that it makes you want to know why she's there in the first place! Keep your stability of updates strong (I promise you, updating every day is really helpful), One last thing. You should fix your chapter titles, it looks really messy.
"I could feel my face turn pale and my eyes wide open" is the correct phrase for that.
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Fantasy · CrimsonMoonLover
She sounds really shy and kind here but when she asked where and who the girl was, she sounded really mean. So it's really confusing.
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Fantasy · CrimsonMoonLover
My head snapping is really scary, you should replace it with a "my head turned"
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Fantasy · CrimsonMoonLover
Before she became Lady Elise ^^
She took a deep breath as she kept her head high once more. It felt like forever now since she killed somebody and she has been itching to do so.
The Duchess' Play Time
Fantasy · LittolSol
I just can't help but notice how great the characters and world development is. Although there were some grammar and punctuation, it can still be understood. Keep up the good work, it's a really promising work and I've added it to my bookmarks! 9.5/10!!!
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original System of A Thousand Souls
THIS NOVEL INVOLVES SEXUAL CONTENT! IF YOU ARE OKAY WITH THE AFOREMENTIONED TAGS, PROCEED WITH CAUTION! GET HARD TOO! Saber, a normal student with no attributes whatsoever, suddenly woke up in the middle of the night to a girl sitting on his chair. "Do you want to be the best?" The girl became one with Saber as something inside him woke up. [You have unlocked the System of A Thousand Souls!] The woman wanted something in exchange for giving him power, and that simple exchange was... "Be my king, Saber." She revealed to herself as the Goddess of the Moon. Image, not mine.8 Chs 78 Collections
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The Diety Before Humanity
Before Humanity existed, there were living beings called Deities. Like humans, gods have the weak and the strong. No matter what creature you are, you will always be hunting or be hunted. Our protagonist, Sol, was a human when he woke up to realize he became a god. An entity called "The Father" has created all of the gods for one thing — "Create Life". From then on, a competition began on different worlds, some the same. Different creatures and different religions, this was the beginning of life. Sol, who was once a revered scientist, creates civilization once more. Competing with different Gods, making the most powerful creatures in the universe!1 Chs 6 Collections
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The Duchess' Play Time
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WARNING!! THE BOOK CONTAINS BRUTALITY/MURDER/SUICIDE/GORE/ROMANCE SUBPLOTS! IF YOU ARE OKAY WITH THE AFOREMENTIONED TAGS, THEN PLEASE PROCEED WITH CAUTION!!! *** The man named Michael, titled as the "Most Dangerous Murderer in History" has found himself in the body of a Duchess named Lady Elise Le Leon. With his new innocent look and previous perfected skills. Michael now wonders what method he's gonna use on everyone! "What's this?" Michael found a book left by the previous Duchess. A book named "Play Time", a word that symbolizes "time to kill" in his previous world. A request to kill and freedom for a reward. Michael sets out the journey to solve why the Previous Elise wanted these people dead, and how she knew Michael was coming. "Well, from now on. My name is Elise Le Leon!" Michael muttered. (The image is obviously not mine. If you've stayed in webnovel for a while, it is fairly normal.)13 Chs 58 Collections
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Noah Of The Activated
Five years ago, a Diablo-Level Catastrophe hit Luzon of the Philippines without any warnings. Mana beasts swarmed as people died one after another. Noah and his sister Mel were left behind by their mother in hopes to find her husband, yet, five years later, they never came back. Noah and his sister now live without any parents. Noah became an Activated and decides to become a Blacksmith in hopes to make some money and not risk his life to complete his sister's education. However, in Quezon, where the catastrophe started, a mysterious group of anonymous people appeared. One that will shake the world upside-down.11 Chs 24 Collections
Hi, author here. I'm shamelessly putting my novel five stars because I actually got aroused writing it lmao. This is a story about a woman who revealed herself to be a Goddess, chose the protagonist to be his king. Giving him the power of the thousands of souls that the Goddess collections. As new couples, they struggle the everyday life of what they should do as the girlfriend has the pride of a Goddess and the boyfriend has the massive wong and the microscopic talent
System of A Thousand Souls
Fantasy · LittolSol