You have excellent grammar and your story has a good storyline. Please continue with your novel since it will be interesting to see how your main characters develop. [img=recommend]
Please capitalize H of the word "hey"...
Just then the taxi driver got out of his car, and he said: "Hey Smith, where's my money."
Detective Dan Year One
Urban · Jlionbad_9364
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Very good use of the English lhere, Author. Also, your story has a very good start. I was just a little confused about your female MC's name... Is it Marilene or Isabella?[img=faceslap]
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I observed that you have greatly improved in your storytelling skills in this story. However, please find time to go back through your story and improve on your punctuation marks and capitalization uses. [img=recommend]
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