ruined_diaper20

ruined_diaper20

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my diaper. . it's ruined

2020-08-05 Joint Global
Badges 12

Moments 1017
ruined_diaper20
ruined_diaper20
16 days ago
Commented

you should Luan? ***** or ----- when switching points of view or gets confusing in English when you switch from one to the next without letting people know

Zindi stared at the remains of the beast before him, breathing heavily.

Saint of Serenity

Saint of Serenity

Fantasy · Monarch_of_Nyx

ruined_diaper20
ruined_diaper20
16 days ago
Commented

echo? luan?

Ce paragraphe a été supprimé.
Saint of Serenity

Saint of Serenity

Fantasy · Monarch_of_Nyx

ruined_diaper20
ruined_diaper20
18 days ago
Commented

Whats a Xiang village?? knowledge is always welcome :)

ruined_diaper20
ruined_diaper20
23 days ago
Commented

bat like wings?

It was another group of reptilian serpents, but they all had back like wings and spewed acid from their mouths. 

Dimensional Descent

Dimensional Descent

Fantasy · Awespec

ruined_diaper20
ruined_diaper20
23 days ago
Commented

reached back*

His left arm cocked back, his wrist stabilized, his forearm flexing and his shoulder coming to a grinding halt as he reach back as far as his flexibility would allow. 

Dimensional Descent

Dimensional Descent

Fantasy · Awespec

ruined_diaper20
ruined_diaper20
23 days ago
Commented

you don't need following it I'd say enveloping it is good enough or maybe reword it

The needles whistled through the air, a shockingly bright Bow Force following enveloping them.

Dimensional Descent

Dimensional Descent

Fantasy · Awespec

ruined_diaper20
ruined_diaper20
23 days ago
Commented

might wanna revise this one.

The needles whistled through the air, a shockingly bright Bow Force following enveloping them.

Dimensional Descent

Dimensional Descent

Fantasy · Awespec

ruined_diaper20
ruined_diaper20
5 months ago
Commented

imposingly

It stood imposing tall, easily surpassing Legion in height.

The Golem Mage

The Golem Mage

War · mystic dark

ruined_diaper20
ruined_diaper20
5 months ago
Commented

d is defensive

× D spearman tier one golem ( cost 100 mana)

The Golem Mage

The Golem Mage

War · mystic dark

ruined_diaper20
ruined_diaper20
5 months ago
Commented

eas 40

[You have met the condition for the job change ceremony: Collect 60 Star Fragments.]

Awakening:The Infinite Evolution of My Talent as a Low-Level Awakener

Awakening:The Infinite Evolution of My Talent as a Low-Level Awakener

Fantasy · Whisk92