I suggest getting rid of the commas after "shoot" and "and".
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Anime & Comics · Orion_Art
Change "Not" to "Now" and probably a good idea to get rid of the first comma in the sentence.
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Anime & Comics · Orion_Art
Very vanilla, I know. But I'd rather not have the police called on me if we ever went on a date or be labeled a predator. And it's only going to get worse the older I get, as she is stuck as a midget.
Anime & Comics · Leylin_Blackwood
At least 13 bottles of wine, giggity.
While I totally agreed, I'd much rather process the fucked-up shit I saw in there after joining Altrouge in one of her 'Sampling' sessions.
Anime & Comics · Leylin_Blackwood
"You can just think of him as... A big bad dragon, Klee."
Video Games · Unusual_
"Come on" is also a valid alternative to "Common".
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Anime & Comics · Orion_Art
Common - C'mon
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Anime & Comics · Orion_Art
head to fall - heads to fall
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Anime & Comics · Orion_Art
could probably remove the comma before Riveria
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Anime & Comics · Orion_Art
"You were meant to be a man! A MAN! Go back and send anyone, and I mean anyone, our way!" she screeched, before leaning back and sprawling herself on the boulder.
Fate/False Order
Anime & Comics · Leylin_Blackwood