Legendary_GamerEB

Legendary_GamerEB

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Legendary_GamerEB
Legendary_GamerEB
2 years ago
Commented

author instead of "bot" in the first line it should be "bit"

"Uhm, Kesha, isn't that a bot too rude?" Almina came to the rescue. "Also, did you forget that Yman's physical attributes are far higher now, you know? I even heard the elders talking about his unusual physical stats."

The Mysterious Black Magician

The Mysterious Black Magician

Fantasy · Fhrutz_D_Hollow

Legendary_GamerEB
Legendary_GamerEB
3 years ago
Commented

the second sentence, second word should have "didn't" instead of "wasn't" and the fourth word should be "have" instead of "had"

However, Miss Sonya was one of a kind. She wasn't only had an abundance of mana, she was also good at trapping her enemy. And so Mai found her sturdy wall in the form of Sonya.

The Mysterious Black Magician

The Mysterious Black Magician

Fantasy · Fhrutz_D_Hollow

Legendary_GamerEB
Legendary_GamerEB
3 years ago
Commented

third sentence last word there is a space missing

He wasn't even a person who was gifted with lots of mana. His mana was only a little above Bob. But because Bert was an idiot, he didn't notice that it could lead to his demise.

The Mysterious Black Magician

The Mysterious Black Magician

Fantasy · Fhrutz_D_Hollow

Legendary_GamerEB
Legendary_GamerEB
3 years ago
Commented

author second to last word needs a space

The group proceeded without giving a second look at the lying Abel. After all, it was all Abel's fault.

The Mysterious Black Magician

The Mysterious Black Magician

Fantasy · Fhrutz_D_Hollow

Legendary_GamerEB
Legendary_GamerEB
3 years ago
Commented

first word needs a space author

Ultima and Vortex failed to hear their conversation as they were quite a distance from where the door was.

The Mysterious Black Magician

The Mysterious Black Magician

Fantasy · Fhrutz_D_Hollow

Legendary_GamerEB
Legendary_GamerEB
3 years ago
Commented

author the 4th word is combined. separate one, of, and the

It was also one of the reasons he agreed to Almina's group to come along.

The Mysterious Black Magician

The Mysterious Black Magician

Fantasy · Fhrutz_D_Hollow

Legendary_GamerEB
Legendary_GamerEB
3 years ago
Replied to Black_reaper

I wonder if the author is able to choose those two to be customized since 2 chapters for privilege is 1 coin

Legendary_GamerEB
Legendary_GamerEB
3 years ago
Commented

author 3rd word needs a space after is

<Partner, she is better than you in using that skill.> Sistela, who was currently in resonance with him, suddenly interjected. "Well, as expected of her. She was the elite class leader, after all."

The Mysterious Black Magician

The Mysterious Black Magician

Fantasy · Fhrutz_D_Hollow

Legendary_GamerEB
Legendary_GamerEB
3 years ago
Commented

also withhigher needs one too to become with and higher

After the signal to start the fight, everyone's eyes were on Almina. After all, she was the most popular fledgling trainee in this city's Academy. A person who can defeat an opponent with higher-Level than her. 

The Mysterious Black Magician

The Mysterious Black Magician

Fantasy · Fhrutz_D_Hollow

Legendary_GamerEB
Legendary_GamerEB
3 years ago
Commented

author 3rd sentence first word needs a space after a

After the signal to start the fight, everyone's eyes were on Almina. After all, she was the most popular fledgling trainee in this city's Academy. A person who can defeat an opponent with higher-Level than her. 

The Mysterious Black Magician

The Mysterious Black Magician

Fantasy · Fhrutz_D_Hollow