we dont care bout no damn christmas story start updatin regularly midget
The time had come. The Legend of the God-Emperor was about to begin.
Elden Ring : Godrick The Golden
Video Games · Marine0IQ
Dont get me weong i feel the pacing is good the only problem/concern i have is the fight scene(s) because it went over so many chapters when it kould have been wrapped up in 2 or 3 but so far im loving the story i cant see wea it goes from here
speed the story up it really shouldnt take about 5 chapters to finish one fight 1-3 chaps 5 is to much and i get building character or the world but spending time reading about 5 chaps of ONE single fight makes the story un interesting but i feel this actually does have potential to be a great warhammer book also is this pre40k? or during or after?
The story is good so far but slow the story down or write some chapters (one before the wake up chapter for details on the MC and why he is how he is) and put one before the Wake up chapter then put some after to really explain how his horde grew and the struggles hes had controlling it (some of the dothraki probably tried to challenge him for the khal position) But if you dont want to do that try to mix it up a little really build up the characters and the world maybe do a little bit of kingdom building drop some flash backs of the MC and the travels hes done with the horde and then with how the story progresses show how he interacts with different people and how he thinks maybe switch the POV later down the line when the story has more chaps so the readers dont get bored but really great story so far ALSO A FEW BOOKS I RECOMMEND YOU LOOK AT ARE "The Burnt Prince-GOT SI" "Raiden's Storm (ASOIAF)" "GOT: The Golden Lion" I feel like they might be a books that can give you ideas on how to improve and make your story go smooth
Mix it up a little then so really build up the characters and the world maybe do a little bit of kingdom building drop some flash backs of the MC and the travels hes done with the horde and then with how the story progresses show how he interacts with different people and how he thinks maybe switch the POV later down the line when the story has more chaps so the readers dont get bored but really great story so far
slow the story down flesh it out develop tha world and the characters
kan he collect skulls? please or like ribs? SKULLS FOR THE SKULL THRONE or RIBS FOR THE RIB HALL something?
if you guys like this go read these 2 manhwas the knight one is literally just this book but about a knight everytime he dies he sees the embodiment of death great read so far and the Murim one is something like this also has 100+ chaps (I havent red this movel yet im excited if its anything like those two manhwas
cmon mane if you gon have him land in america use american measurements this is around 881 pounds
"General, he's definitely not human. His weight is around 400 kilograms."
DC: Rise Of The Kryptonian Tyrant
Anime & Comics · Teritori