huh?
M'gann just stood there taken aback and flew away crying. "Ugh, I'm such a screw up." I went after M'gann to apologize when SuperBoy stopped me. "I think you've apologized enough just go somewhere else that's not around her or me right now." "I understand Connor but let me explain." "Get out now!." Connor said protectively and slightly irritated.
Anime & Comics · Knight_Hawke
lol I know Jedi aren't bumped up this fast unless its a special case, times of war, or they are just prodigy/genius.
"As of today the Jedi Council hereby grants Zarik the rank of Jedi Master and as a gift the republic and the chancellor has deemed him worthy of having his own clone legion aswell as his own starfighter and Capital Ship." Master Skywalker finished the speech. "Wait, what?" "Bu-But how and why?" "I'll tell you about it all later." Master Windu whispered to me.
Sci-fi · Knight_Hawke
I appreciate it
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I fixed it
while I could have it's clear their going to introduce Starfire and raven at some point
I've made it so each character has their own unique dialogue and their own way of speaking and being able to tell who's talking and who's replying instead of doing your cliche of saying something and who's replying back only time I do is if it's sentence cut off by an interruption or just plain old thinking. There are small time jumps in the first few chapters because I'm keeping most of the young justice team and adventures the same. I'm not steering from the original vision just introducing a new antagonist and MCs who are not part of the Young justice universe but help shape them into better versions of themselves on both sides. yes I agree the Grammer needs work. I hope I answered most of your core issues with this fanfiction.
I'm not gonna change the pairings from the young justice it's literally just introducing the future of my original work which is about to drop soon
what's the matter Luke?
early dialogue that's more than likely not going to be in the final product fight
"Arctora'hm, you've certainly gotten stronger than the last time, but this is the end!" "Darkseid, you've tried to control my life one too many times but now is the time I rise above you not as a King, not as a god and not even as a man. But as a spartan, and an elite god! It's time to give this world and apokalypse back to the people I may not be able to kill you but let's just give this one last go!"
Young Justice: Red-Eclipse
Anime & Comics · Knight_Hawke