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Please better leave it as it is, the story had its dark time but if you keep rewriting everything every time you improve as an author, the same thing will happen as with Naruto and we won't advance anything which is sad for many readers but it's awesome and I've always liked it quality over quantity like that. Come on!

One question: is this story Harem or not? It is since you did not put the label I think it is not but the doubts remain anyway

Great chapter thanks

Thanks for chapter

Just try not to leave this one for what you like more or shorten it, this one promises to last until sinnoh or kalos please don't take this one away from us, like when you restarted the naruto fic (restarting it made no difference it felt the same although it improved in the grammar aspect felt the same), please don't go to get more attached to that one and abandon this one I already love autin as mc so that you can later remove it

Aren't you going to create them out of nothing? It's just fear because of the comment that said sorry

And very conveniently you know how to make all the human technology since the ancient Chinese era and how to apply it? You know, I don't even have to say how that was seen in the chapter.

I think I missed the name, not everything should have blood in the name because it's not that way, how about infant killing soul? Sounds more like what is described

In your tech jacket he will be younger? Or how it differs from the original since it takes place in the same universe when Mark is no longer on Earth.

Team No-more heroes

Team titan slash

Team cross slayer

Black radiant

I don't want to sound critical but problems equal a good plot or an acceptable arc, removing them early equals plain and bland wish fulfillment.

Very empty, give too much power to a protagonist and you generate hatred, plus the fact that he does not need a power up for now with everything he has, if he trains him he could defeat thragg and the novel would end shortly after, I know the author said it is nfws with a plot but it develops it too well for me to drop it because we asked for more nfws

Pretty good but I think it was too short and you could have given Debbie more prominence in this chapter as a point of view when her husband confesses everything or some cameo hero as black samson

Personally, I think it's better to give it to Amber or get it herself because the suit gave an ordinary human the strength equal to Mark's, imagine giving that to a vultrumite with speed strength, too rotobromoe the plot, although it would be great if he could mess with that story, I seriously don't like the protagonist, he reminds me of Peter from the guardians of the galaxy, hateful, crybaby and very immature (even cross it out, Starlord was better than him, for God's sake)

You could use the villains that I know are shown in the comics, not all of them are great villains but there is mention of some that you can use from time to time to fill in, there are also the spin off comics of invincible that can help further expand the universe of this same , or use drama, the rex and eve thing can be used to complete a mini arc and make it a good arc

I agree with this guy aside, the protagonist becomes an idiot with his girlfriend because he cheats on her with a woman when he cheats on her once every adventure