Doublenile

Doublenile

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A weeb who is happy to die to test the reincarnation theory. Hey God if u checking for reincarnation candidates, I'm always happy to help :)

2019-07-16 Joint United Kingdom
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Doublenile
Doublenile
2 years ago
Replied to H2Oz_Anxious

i read up to 56 and i disliked most of it. the cliche turn wasnt to my taste and tbh if i wanted something like that i have many many novels with cliche turns like that which are more my style. you did good though, if it wasnt for that cliche moment i think i could have gotten really into the novel, hope you continue and do well in the future chapters

Doublenile
Doublenile
2 years ago
Posted

overall it was decent. had a solid start with only a few minor cringe moments that where fine. unfortunatly at chapter 49 it changed. from the start it was quite a similar feeling to "The beginning after the end", but at chapter 49 it just straight copied with the only difference being the method of seperation from his parents. (btw copied losely, like it wasnt word for word but it was the near exact same situation and annoying cliche shit). I know authors like to add conflict and need to do it for the plot, but you actually dont. adding a forced section just for "plot" is dumb, 1 its cliche and personally pisses me off, but 2 if it went down the more pieceful route of actually completing the journey "plot" can still happen. Conflicts at the city, training against stronger and better people, etc. Writing quality was decent, a few mistakes and oddly worded sentences but nothing that majorly affected anything. Characters where decent, had a few laughs as well as a few cringe moments but not bad ones. Dynamic between parents was sometimes odd but overall they where better than the mc himself. World is good, explains the systems decently well and is intresting. The mc is fine, but not to my tastes massively. To me it was very unatural and weird that the moment he reincarnated he cried at having parents. like at least wait a few years for feelings to develop. He was also a little weird with his logic, like he would train to get stronger seemingly having novel knowledge but then gives himself a bunch of obvious red flags. he was also a little too childish for me, now i dont mind them having fun but he was too into the child roll for someone with his mental age. The only major problem i have with the story was the chapter 49 part. it ruined it, was unoriginal and boring, and personally would have much rather seen him be with his family and learning stuff their than useless and plot armour driven forced combat.

Doublenile
Doublenile
2 years ago
Commented

was good up till here, its just turning out to be a beginning after the end rip off, like why. its not only cliche like the title says but its a bad cliche that just ruins it. unfortunate it went down the predictable route of forcing conflict and likely going to replace any hard work or talent he has with plot armour.

Doublenile
Doublenile
2 years ago
Replied to WillOblivionK

ive read some of those, like i might be a fake cultivator and chaotic sword god, i started library of heavens path but didnt get too into it. tbh novels like that would be quite hard to do a ff on, there are so many power levels and information that need to be taken in to acount with every step. they are also super long novels so planning ahead is super hard and tedius. i would be quite tempted by "bringing the farm to live in another world" or "Apothesis" since i really enjoyed them but large cultivations ones like that would require a lot of research and time since i would activly need to read the whole thing then constantly check back and forth and wiki and stuff. its a maybe but unlikely for those long ones, shorter ones like battle through the heavens are more likely.

Doublenile
Doublenile
2 years ago
Replied to WillOblivionK

so far ive done a "beginning after the end" tho thats on hold/dropped due to time. right now i'm doing a black clover one but its a personal thing i just chill on in free time and not something i plan to upload right now. i do really wanna do some cultivation ff's like "tales of demons and gods", "battle through the heavens", and some others but again that takes a lot of time. maybe in future i will do a cultivation ff, i would really like to do one

Doublenile
Doublenile
2 years ago
Replied to WillOblivionK

thx for review. i would also like to really continue this novel but time constraints r hard. there might be a chance for around Christmas/ winter as uni work lessens a lot then but would also depend on motivation since rn i'm kinda into doing ff's.

Doublenile
Doublenile
2 years ago
Replied to Guillhermo_De_Leon

yo dude, spamming doesnt make me just magically continue. i'm just really busy and aint got time to do novels right now. might continue, might not will depend on if i get enough free time to reliably do it.

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Doublenile
Doublenile
2 years ago
Replied to ArthurCE10

yh he condensed his mana from when he didnt have a core yet. when he awakened, that condensed mana created his mana core. which i think was when he was 2. so its been around a year or something since then. dont forget he doesnt spend every second working on his mana, he splits time between, physical, training, enjoying his life as a child and then magic devopment.

His core is still in the black level so he meditates at least a few hours everyday and half of his 8 hours sleep every night. Even with only 4 hours sleep, because he can take in minimal amounts of Ki from the air, that is enough to reduce the fatigue to nothing and makes him feel fully rested.

The Horizon After the End

The Horizon After the End

Anime & Comics · Doublenile

Doublenile
Doublenile
2 years ago
Replied to ArthurCE10

in the original? cause i made it up. it never really mentions there is ki, he only says that mana is similar to ki in his previous life. i added ki in this world myself and added to it and that it has these effects.

These past months I have been splitting my attention between developing my mana core but also sensing Ki in the air and within myself to minimally strengthen my body. Enough so that I should now be able to walk.'

The Horizon After the End

The Horizon After the End

Anime & Comics · Doublenile

Doublenile
Doublenile
3 years ago
Replied to Ratisu

same, ive been struggling recently to read it. its just become quite average and taking on more and more cliche/standard stuff like the memories, stupid conflict's, the standard where people have been secretly cultivating. i'm also just tempted to drop, but drop in general. it started really good but just fallen off a lot since the dreams.

  • The Horizon After the End original

    The Horizon After the End

    Anime & Comics ACTION ADVENTURE REINCARNATION MAGIC HAREM HIGHIQ

    After a magnificent stand off against Truck-Kun Arthur Pendragon who was a normal average person named after some great hero in a fairy tale gets transported into the body of Arthur Leywin, snatching the chance away from King Grey. With his limited knowledge of the future and the partial memories left behind from King Grey, he beings his journey to see the limits the horizon brings after his end and make all his dreams come true in this new world. ======================================= Note - This is a Fan-Fiction of "The Beginning After the End" and is based off the manhwa and not the novel. Note - I do not own the original story and most of the characters in this Fan-Fic. I also do not own the cover image and if the creator or licensor doesn't want me to use it let me know and I take it down. Please make sure to check out the original novel and show the creator some love and also check out the manhwa since I'm basing the events of this fan-fic off that. ======================================= If anyone wants to make suggestions or ask something then put a comment on the chapter or paragraph and I will likely answer it. Lastly any and all reviews that are not actual reviews will be deleted. This includes things like people wanting xp without reading, false review for the xp, advertisement of some scam, or just people putting something like "Its good" or "Its bad" and things like "Bad,Bad,Bad". I will not tolerate these things. Its a review section so please leave reviews. If you like the story then I do hope you leave a review. Just basic thoughts like what you liked, what you disliked. I’m not asking for 5 stars only reviews or reviews that are professional and detail each thing. Just people’s thoughts so people can make an accurate judgement of my Fan-Fic.

    21 Chs 821 Collections

  • Supreme Gods Memories within a Cultivation World original

    Supreme Gods Memories within a Cultivation World

    Eastern ADVENTURE REINCARNATION R18 SYSTEM OVERPOWERED CULTIVATION KINGDOMBUILDING HIGHIQ

    4.56

    An avid reader of manga and light novels suddenly gets reincarnated in another world after his death. He will use his smarts and cunning to act around his new family, act like a prince trying to better his kingdom and use his knowledge of light novels and his cheats to prevent cliche's happening and rule the world living out his desirers. While also using his cheats of heavens database and an internal world to his fullest advantage. ====================================== Note: The mc will fake act around his family, though they may grow on him into real feelings. He will do everything for the betterment of himself or what ever he feels like. There will be a large harem. Here is why: 1. In a cultivation world where one gains power in order to fulfil their goals, have a large harem is more common and uncommon. It is also one of his goals as I feel that 80% of people if given the chance would take advantage of the world and setting and just live how u wanna live, and in the MC's case that's to have lots of girls. 2. The MC's background. His background is as a loner who has no friends and wants doesn't want to be alone anymore. Hence why he wants a large harem. Its a way of him getting a large amount of people who he can trust within the cultivation world and love and care for him. The mc will be cruel as well, like if slaughtering an entire village of innocents will be more beneficial to him that not then he will have no scruples doing so. After all this is a dog eats dog world, morals have no place until your strong. He will enslave a lot of the girls for his harem, though lots will be for his maids harem. He will make tiers due to wanting to have thousands. Spoilers - His powers are Heavens Database - kind of like library of heavens path but different. An internal world - he can put stuff, things and people in there, including himself. And finally memories of multiple supreme gods - giving him knowledge of almost everything. Finally. This is only my second novel, i personally hate MC's who are illogical and dont take advantage of their status, power and knowledge. So expect a semi OP MC. but I will be making him less OP by making it slow for him to cultivate and put restrictions on his powers, these will be logical restrictions though, not random annoying ones for the sake of making mc not OP. He will be OP, just a logical way that makes sense kidna. Its Op, hard to make sense of it.

    80 Chs 1k Collections

  • I'm a Centipede? (DROPPED!) original

    I'm a Centipede? (DROPPED!)

    Games ACTION ADVENTURE REINCARNATION SYSTEM MAGIC CULTIVATION

    In a average house in England is a young man called Lushan Crest who does not do anything other than reading light novels and playing games. Every day he wishes in his head that he could be one of those chosen ones who get transported to another world so he can start a new life. He wishes for this every day hoping that when he wakes the next day it will be somewhere else in a different persons body. Little did he know that his wish would come true. Just not in the way he thought.

    7 Chs 81 Collections