Gray224

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Gray224
Gray224
3 months ago
Posted

overall it's not a bad story just a few bits that could be checked to make the reading smoother and constant gender change of the MC drag it down

Gray224
Gray224
6 months ago
Commented

none of the chapters after this one works but It might just be me

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Gray224
Gray224
6 months ago
Commented

Luna for the win

Gray224
Gray224
6 months ago
Commented

no harem please

Gray224
Gray224
6 months ago
Commented

depends if it's Deadpool level they would heal in a day or 2 no problem anything lower I would say a week or 2 and double it if cauterised. but if it's magic or curse ability probably instantly but drains their strength and stamina like piccolo in DBZ

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Gray224
Gray224
6 months ago
Commented

if you plan to have them using haki you should definitely increase the power levels of the enemy's or it won't be a good fight for alibasta,skypia and CP 9 p.s please don't make the MC op because some bleach powers are ridiculous

Gray224
Gray224
6 months ago
Commented

Nami

Gray224
Gray224
8 months ago
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Gray224
Gray224
1 years ago
Commented

Thanks for chapters it's so hard to find a good mass effect novel I hope you continue to write. P. S please don't make the mc really op