That actually seems like a pretty interesting concept since it could really highlight how unfair fate is. Though im not sure i could really pull that off truth be told.
I have one big problem with this story I think, you dont show enough. You told us things about your character that you very well could have shown us through his interactions and stuff. Also the time skips to many for how little we really understand the protagonist. I dont yhink its bad so far though truth be told just should’ve been stretched out more.
… is this a charater flaw or just plot convience because If its a character flaw thats interesting.
She said all that while tears were streaming out I run over to Gaia and I can fix her but I don't want to ruin the storyline so I say
Milim’s brother
Anime & Comics · Cheesy_Dogs
Glad someone got it lol
"Well of course! You aren't dealing with the average human anymore-" The small sound of something cutting through the air makes me flinch causing the blade which had been thrown to merely produce a slight graze on my cheek.
Fate/Usurper
Anime & Comics · AvaDumont
Her character would look similar to Jahy.
I am appearance wise for all intents and purposes what a Japanese person or Otaku would call a 'Gyaru.' With my uniform unbuttoned at the top showing off exactly how 'mature' I was for my age. Just like my mother I was without a doubt a beauty and no one could rebuke that, and as my philosophy goes, if you have it then you have to show it off. I mean what's the point in having treasure if not to let others admire it as jealousy wells up in their chests?
Fate/Usurper
Anime & Comics · AvaDumont
Yup medusa
"If you insist Minori. Lancer, are you going to play as well?" I ask the now decloaked Lancer sitting on the couch next to me in a nightgown.
Fate/Usurper
Anime & Comics · AvaDumont
I dont think I'm fully understanding. What do you want to stomp? And I can understand not liking the style of story telling it has alot of vague terminology and just so much lore but alot of it could be seen as underdeveloped. Like what you can do with most magecraft is just undescribed for everything besides jewel and crest worm.
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original Fate/Usurper
A teenage girl reincarnates as a Matou with little memory of her actual past, stuck in a holy grail war that's definitely not a part of canon, she must figure out how exactly she's going to survive without proper magecraft. -- First novel so keep that in mind when reviewing. Also, suggestions and criticisms are always welcome. -- I don't own anything from Fate/ the Nasuverse besides my OC. Cover picture found on the Battle Arena Amino.15 Chs 566 Collections
Nepotism wins again?
Ah! Don't be mistaken, I don't do this for everyone. It was only because I sensed no deceit in her words that I gave her a chance. I only gave her a chance for a interview, but a little less difficult compared to others.
The Legend of the God of Destruction
Others · HolyCentaur