KamaDeva

KamaDeva

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2019-04-04 Joint Global
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KamaDeva
KamaDeva
1 years ago
Commented

hmm only indian girls? need some blondes and redheads

KamaDeva
KamaDeva
1 years ago
Commented

Man you are writing this like soap opera, like just progress the plot... we will all turn old till karna reach adulthood.... if you don't understand what good pace means then here... good pace = sufficient amount of things should happen in a single chapter.Pace doesn't mean more chapters.

KamaDeva
KamaDeva
1 years ago
Commented

Interesting. Will there will other mytholgies in it or it's just a purely mahabharata fanfic? And will you create OCs for harem?

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KamaDeva
KamaDeva
1 years ago
Commented

Nice. Just make it happen fast and keep it swift.[img=strong]But wait was kaaliya sent by kansa?

(A/N : You guys wanted action right? Here is your action, I bet no one expected Kansa's entry.

I Become Karna With a Million Times Crit System In Mahabharata.

I Become Karna With a Million Times Crit System In Mahabharata.

Fantasy · ForManaga

KamaDeva
KamaDeva
1 years ago
Replied to ForManaga

As you said there are too many characters in MB like Kansa but is he important to Karna's story? Like Krishna and Kansa has their own thing going on and so I think that you won't be having to spend considerable time on him. Similarly you can skip a lot of characters.You introducing those 4 girls and the fox was super interesting, and I can see they are going to be big part of Karna's story in future.Any suggestion if I can give is not to drag an arc for too long. Avoid filler content, a chapter should have content instead of just words. You can plan and spread out arcs properly. A short timeskip of even two years will make us readers feel like that plot is progressing.And time and words given to a character should be proportional to the impact of the character on karna. Put more focus on main cast and less on side ones, as I'm pretty sure main cast is going to be big because of harem.Though it's just my personal opinion, you should do a QnA chapter to see what your readers feel so you can plan the plot better. Otherwise good luck.

KamaDeva
KamaDeva
1 years ago
Commented

Speed up the story bro... otherwise I'm seeing another 200 chapters before he grows up... Like I appreciate and respect your dedication to have written so many chapters, most can't do that, but we are crawling like a snail. Like I don't even feel like voting with PS now since it's dragging so much. Your update frequency is amazing, at least a chapter per day. Too good. It's just those chapters are not taking plot forward with right pace, too slow. Don't take it wrong away I just really like the concept and want you to do better.

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KamaDeva
KamaDeva
1 years ago
Commented

Please increase the pace. Very little happens in every chapter.

KamaDeva
KamaDeva
1 years ago
Commented

Instead of likes of durvasa, drona or parshuram... how about a goddess from some other mythology?

(A/N : Again who do you think Karna's first teacher would be? 

I Become Karna With a Million Times Crit System In Mahabharata.

I Become Karna With a Million Times Crit System In Mahabharata.

Fantasy · ForManaga

KamaDeva
KamaDeva
1 years ago
Commented

Jean Grey, Scarlet Witch, Wonder Woman

KamaDeva
KamaDeva
1 years ago
Posted

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