This is just stupid. You can't explain this away by saying she is good at making things. the only plausible explanation is that she works for Cecil or something to have access to this type of technology.
"I told you I'm good at making things. The one you're wearing right now was something I made when I got tired of dyeing my hair but that's beside the point. You must see its value right? You might not care all that much about your identity but with this, you won't even need to bother hiding it too much."
A Different Kryptonian [Invincible/Brightburn] SI
Anime & Comics · Unknown_To_All
Your not making any sense.
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Overlord: My Reign as Ainz
Anime & Comics · Sr_Angel
this is essence of Gacha not stats
Woah… I kinda expected stats like strength or luck. Well to be expected of a Gacha stats I guess? Better than nothing.
In Marvel with Gacha
Anime & Comics · Yogun_Van
this is so satisfying for me. There are so many HP fanfics where they just go, "I need basilisk venom or feindfyre to destroy the horcrux". They use it as a lame excuse to keep it around to cause trouble later.
I let the fire rage on for a couple minutes before I stop and vanish it. The result is a glob of burned metal. Three down four to go.
I am Peter Pettigrew
Movies · Daoist171437
this is actually really busted. he is breaking the laws of thermodynamics
For now that is a very good thing but in the future when there are more people living and producing energy there might be an issue by overfeeding my energy core and as much as I can make it wistand and fill if it somehow happen to someday have a lot more energy than it will ever spend and somehow by some miracle something happen to it then, well I don't want to imagine it, it's like the explosion of a sun if not a galaxy so I have to limit it capacity to store energy or find something else to do with this energy.
Dc: start in Young Justice
Anime & Comics · overFantasies
This is a really solid Harry Potter story. The world is more expanded upon than most other fanfics, and there is an actual world outside of the protagonist. The only real critique I have as of chapter 25 is that dialog between characters and their thoughts feel unnatural. Oftentimes, the same phrases will be repeated the same way. e.g, when Harry talks to the administrators who will decide his future education, they all say the exact same phrases when talking about him. Ramble Underneath I don't really care if authors use AI to help them write, but it can sometimes lead to a limited vocabulary(it might not be AI, and the author could just struggle with convincing dialog). A lot of AI stories use a higher level of vocabulary but don't apply it correctly and ends up making dialog too rigid
so the author in the story made a clone of btth
However, in the past ten years, he has hardly made any progress. At the age of sixteen, he is still stuck at the first level of martial artist. He has become a laughingstock of everyone in Tiannan City and is also the target of everyone's bullying in the family.
I Became the Villain's Ancestor
Anime & Comics · Nizeara_Osaiyol
Why lie and say he just now gained these abilities? He really doesn't need to. If you are going to have an op mc, it's better for him to show his strength and not have to tip toe around revealing it.
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1. I think it would be weird to have more partners. you explained that he and raven have a "connection". will he also have this connection to other girls? if not then it is kind of unfair to them.
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original Gacha Power
"I'm finally level sixty and got maxed crests. That was a good 500k "investment"." What if your life became pay-to-win. ------This story is heavily inspired by Meta Gacha Essence in Marvel. It's a good fanfic.1 Chs 10 Collections
This story is very meh. The premise is very cool, but the execution is very lackluster. The main character is actually autistic. The first interaction he has with Eina is just ridiculous. The main problem I have is that you can clearly tell that AI is being used heavily. Now, I don't have anything against using AI, but you need to carefully edit it so it doesn't just repeat the same crap. You see this a lot when the characters are talking to each other. It is unnatural and they repeat the same thing a lot, just worded differently. The use of AI also affects the pacing. It takes forever for anything to actually happen. You get a lot of useless inner dialogue instead of actual story. There are also a lot of inconsistencies that just can't be explained away. If the mc watches Danmachi, then he has definitely watched other anime, right? Then why doesn't he go to other worlds that he can gain power in like dragon ball, any martial arts anime, or any other media that he can gain a powerup from. That would be too easy though and besides, the author wants to do a danmachi fic so he can't go to other worlds and become to op. Even if you wanted to say that those worlds are too dangerous then that would be a lie. While yes, DBZ and One Piece have higher power scaling, that doesn't matter. It is just as likely he will meet Ottar than he would kaido when he first enters the world. There are many people in Danmachi who could crush the mc just the same way. The first thing I and many other people would do after getting this power would be to go online and figure out the best worlds to go to. The saying "show, don't tell" is the main advice I would give to make this story better
Creating The Strongest Familia In Danmachi
Anime & Comics · Najicablitz626