KaiserFrunn

Hmm another setup chapter, though maybe this is just your writing style XD Once again I did notice some lines where it felt like you tried to over explain a point and it would’ve been better to be brief and let the reader fill in the gaps For example in Block 21 if you removed the words between the first and second commas the block becomes more subtle and filled with subtext becoming much easier to read and more thought provoking Subtext is good umu I wonder if this is the Seven I know? Great to see him umu XD I do also think this chapter could’ve been spread out and the interegration of Liz into the Village and Seven’s character arc of gaining confidence could’ve been a good first story arc/season Anyway Thank you for the chapter and until next time~

Hihi Liz~ Good prologue that reads as a character BIO/backstory and places us at good place to start the journey while briefly introducing some mechanics of the world (setting, some organisations and mention of a magic system which i am interested to hear more about) If I had one critique it would be that there is some over detailing of certain points, for example I feel that Lizzy’s resistance was mentioned 1 or 2 too many times, though this will probably be less noticeable when there is more dialogue (good luck with that, one of the hardest things I found when doing my own writing XD) Congrats on this first step and looking forward to more! Kaiser-Frunn

Congrats Rhinoz, been reading since the beginning and it’s amazing to see how far we’ve come… and I can’t wait to see how far we go ^-^

Rip and tear! Kill all goblins!

I don’t usually Comment, but I wanted to say the new cover looks great! Can’t Wait to get into the meat and bones of the liyue arc, I wonder what the other Adepti will think of Iris and her Master by extension, though it seems like it will be mostly positive reactions ^-^

Been a while but well worth the wait, Great chapter today ^-^ I wonder when Karl will be able to fly~

And a new fetish of Peter reveals itself… Anyway welcome back!

What a granite joke Helpy XD And it seems the universe is being nice to Peter For today at least, usually You’d get a bandit attack at a time like this no?

Well that was a great Adventure with many ups and downs, epic battles, adventure and a good chunk of lewdness O/////O XD I can’t wait to see what our merry band of idiots will get up to next, the paths Before them seemingly infinite! ...But if you need it feel free to take a small break, i’ll at least be here waiting for you ^-^ Until next time!

Helpy Being both useless and yet spitten the truest facts XD Also poor Shadowy Chunii’s, to have all their efforts be eaten up is quite sad for them, though its nice to see them not giving up yet, how else would our hero find suitable food for them and their daughter~