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Nitrox2

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Nitrox2
5 days ago
Posted

Why did you bring a fucking system at chapter 26 ? It was so out of the blue and completly unnecessary... You should work more on your character development. 20 chapters in and we know practically nothing of the past of the MC, his attitude, his goal, his resolve etc ... The world background was too rushed. He stayed 1 year in the mortal world and we know nearly nothing (cost of living, his relationship with other character, his living condition etc...).

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Nitrox2
6 days ago
Commented

Extrême confusion of the name of the professor…

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Nitrox2
3 months ago
Commented

The problem is not the pace, it's the information in each chapter. If the chapter don't bring significant development to your story, increase the pace of just time skip.

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Nitrox2
3 months ago
Posted

Why the fuck would you post an MTL translation on this site without editing ?

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Nitrox2
4 months ago
Posted

excellent fanfiction. It lack a bit of character and world development but if the story continu, I hope it will be resolved.

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Nitrox2
4 months ago
Commented

Can you create a patreon account please ?

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Nitrox2
4 months ago
Posted

I looked for copper and I found gold. Extremely good story with 14 chapters. I hope the autor will release chapter with the samequality in the future !

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Nitrox2
5 months ago
Commented

It was really interesting. Don’t be afraid to have a MC with exceptional talent. It will be necessary later in the story to justify some situations

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Nitrox2
5 months ago
Commented

Burning damage halve physical attack in pokemon games btw. If a machamp was burned, it’s normally over for him

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