The story seems interesting so far, I do not know what it is, but it feels like this story hits all in the right spots. I just can tell that the MC is someone that will live in my head for quite some time. I really do look forward to the world that the author will craft here. It really has the potential to be a really great story
I really enjoyed the story so far, I really can not find any complain about the story. The character are lifelike, the grammar is nothing to scoff at. Author, I really like your story, so make sure you keep on making the story even more awesome.
Great novel, the first chapter pulled me in, would recommend to fantasy lovers of all kinds, the main character is cool, and the world building is decent.
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thats one of the problems old Born and Torn has sadly
After waking up, the first thing I after checking the empty area was checking up on my body the best way I could. Because my mobility was still quite sluggish, seems like it is still under the influence of the paralysis-inducing toxin. After checking every inch of my body I found several inconsistencies. During and following the events after my struggle against the mutated goldfish, I have not taken the time to check out my body. Quite sad that having attached limbs was enough for me in that situation. On my forehead, I felt remnants of their holy power carved deep into my skin. It seems to be a word in a foreign language. This stigma did not hurt at all, but if I start to recall the sensation of holy power. The stigma begins to shine brightly. Even if it invokes some kind of shame in me, I still can use it as a source of light in this dark cave, that I am currently inside of. In comparison, the state of my left leg is much more severe, besides it still being broken in several places, there now was a bulge on it as well. This bulge is pulsating in an ordinary and calm fashion. Yet if its touched it retracts and it feels quite squishy and many small pebbles can be felt beneath my skin.
Born&Torn (Old)
Fantasy · Fearmongering
Nope he is not, I think
After waking up, the first thing I after checking the empty area was checking up on my body the best way I could. Because my mobility was still quite sluggish, seems like it is still under the influence of the paralysis-inducing toxin. After checking every inch of my body I found several inconsistencies. During and following the events after my struggle against the mutated goldfish, I have not taken the time to check out my body. Quite sad that having attached limbs was enough for me in that situation. On my forehead, I felt remnants of their holy power carved deep into my skin. It seems to be a word in a foreign language. This stigma did not hurt at all, but if I start to recall the sensation of holy power. The stigma begins to shine brightly. Even if it invokes some kind of shame in me, I still can use it as a source of light in this dark cave, that I am currently inside of. In comparison, the state of my left leg is much more severe, besides it still being broken in several places, there now was a bulge on it as well. This bulge is pulsating in an ordinary and calm fashion. Yet if its touched it retracts and it feels quite squishy and many small pebbles can be felt beneath my skin.
Born&Torn (Old)
Fantasy · Fearmongering
What a promising start to a novel, I can not help but wonder how the story will develop with a system. I really liked the characters and the way the opening was used to establish the setting. If you are looking for a good read, this novel looks promising.
I really like the world-building here. The premise of this book harbours a lot of potential. The characters, despite seeing so little of them, seem almost too real. I can't wait to find out what happens next. Thank you for writing this great story author!
The beginning was unexpectedly gripping. I can not help but wonder how great this story will become in the future if it is already this fun at just 3 chapters in. Looking forward to reading more in the future.
Great read, with deep characters and an interesting premise. I can not wait to see how it will develop. I love the worldbuilding and the powers shown so far. Keep it up author!
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original Captain Capitalism: The Money-Maker System
Born with the wrong kind of talent, shunned from his family, removed of his succession rights and made the guardian of the lowest of the low dungeon─the infamous, most terrible, dungeon that no one visits unless they have to...that was Moros' home. Until a certain wall crumbles, and a new realm sends out its deadly invitation with Moros name on it. It was a hell that was made for him. A hell he will soon call home...and best of all, there is a lot of money to be made.106 Chs 18 Collections
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Born&Torn
A world bereft of purpose. A soul never born for one. A world's end has concluded. A soul's end marks another beginning. A world will take. A soul has given. A story of something that should not exist. A story of something that ceased to exist. A story of something that, without any purpose, exists. A story, not one of heroes, but a journey of a hypocrite to find meaning, in a world devoid of meaning for him. ------------------------------------------------------------------- Details about the story The story is a slow burner Written in First Person Chapter size 2k-6 words on average. Relase schedule: Whenever the chapter has been written and edited. Feedback of any kind is greatly apperciated. if there are any other questions/concerns...feel free to ask them. I will update the about section accordingly.5 Chs 3 Collections
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System for Dummies
4.67
Prince Edward Nigel of Isle Secularis, or P. Enis as his friends called him, had everything. Until one day he lost everything. Saved by the THE-ALPHA-OMEGA-SUPER-ULTRA-DELUXE-FINAL-BEST-EVER-ABSOLUTE-APEX-NEW-FANTASTIC-LOVELY-AWESOME-WONDERFUL-FEROCIOUS-TASTY-DEVILISH-Nano-MACRO-GODDISH-REDDISH-YELLOWISH-GREENISH SYSTEM FOR DUMMIES, or in short, AOSUDFBEAANFLAWFTDNMGRYG-System for Dummies he became strong again. Join him as he rises up again, punishes all his bullies, gets a harem and finds every treasure.” Novel contains: Insults to the reader's intelligence, irony, sarcasm. Novel does not contain: Good Synopsis. Notable achievements: Reached 69 collections on the 69th chapter108 Chs 259 Collections
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Me, My Past Selves, And I
All Joe Doe wanted was to bang a crazy hoe. though Joe Doe did not know, that life'd ruin the show. Death came to Joe Doe, through nuts, a true low blow. Now, Joe doe had to bow; there was a trial to undergo. Dead through nuts once more, Joe Doe where art thou? Awoken, now there are two Joe Doe, First one said "Oh no" Death came for John Doe Nr2, now with 3 Joe Doe in tow How many Joe Doe will come to be; what was their destiny? In short, this story is about a guy named John Doe. So, this John Doe is caught in a "Scenario" he has to clear at all cost, but every time he dies it all starts anew. But all his past selves get collected at one place. Through training and other measures, they can strengthen the next version. Come read about the tale of Joe Doe and his countless past selves. On their journey towards either self-love or self-hate. Credit for the Cover picture to Ben Sweet https://unsplash.com/@benjaminsweet14 Chs 22 Collections
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Born&Torn (Old)
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Update 20.05. 2024: This story has been rewritten, or rather is in the process of it. Additionally, if the stars allign, it will also be published on Royal Road. I will not give you a long speech, because the book has been dead on here for quite a while, looking at the last chapter being posted a few years ago. It took some time to develop the necessary skill to do this story justice. Without any further ado... See you soon. Same book title. ------------------------------------------- This is the story of something that should not exist. This is the story of something that ceased to exist. This is the story of something that exists without any purpose. This is not a story about heroes. It is the journey of a hypocrite finding a purpose, in a world devoid of any meaning for him. -----------------------------------------------170 Chs 81 Collections
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Prima Causa
Welcome to your judgement. I am officer Bleak of the Soul judgement bureau. It is my job to determine the value of your soul. So what is your story? ------------------------------------6 Chs 1 Collections
First and foremost, thank you for the reply. I do appreciate the heartfelt advice and thank you for giving my story a chance. Truth be told, I did forget to upload the rest of the written chapters... Right now, about 10 chapters have been written, I usually just publish them on RR, since the story is a better fit there. I just published 5 here, since the first version of this story started on Webnovel itself. I am constantly tweaking and rewriting to give this the quality I think it does deserve. Progress is therefore slow. I am still under the impression that my style of writing is not a great fit for this website, since it is not as clear and direct as many people would like it to be. All that being said, thank you for the review and I hope the reading experience was to your liking!
Born&Torn
Fantasy · Fearmongering