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Perhaps an Aeldari Craftworld
I kind of agree. A lot of convoluted double talk, to increase word count. Though nothing a good edit would have sorted out.
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I am putting Ch506 down as a blip, these last 2chs are much better. Still lacking a bit, but better.
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Ch505 was a great chapter, so why does this one feel like it was written by a different person? The pacing was off and felt really truncated. The writing style didn't match, and the characters all seemed flat having lost a lot of their personality. This would have worked much better as 2 or more chapters, with greater depth in the writing. Just my tuppence worth.
Sadly only a few, but much deserved!!! Many thanks HNY 😁
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Filled with a feeling of excitement he hasn't felt since traveling on foot in his younger days, Eisen slowly stepped into the dark tunnel, at the end of which he could only find a bright light.
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