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11 months ago
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As I said in a previous comment, the author has very good ideas, the general premise of both the powers and the direction that the main character is taking are very good, it's a shame that everything is clouded by the fast pace of the story and the flat characterization of characters, I say all this without the intention of offending, I don't know if this is a hobby for the author, or his first fanfic or if he simply likes to write this way, I just gave my opinion, the fanfic within everything It's still very entertaining to read and I certainly hope it doesn't give up.

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11 months ago
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I would have loved it if they had only given him ownership of a building and for the protagonist to be tasked with repairing it and slowly turning it into an impenetrable fortress. He could also have studied/assimilated technology and knowledge while establishing himself as a cyberpunk street doctor. Everything suddenly seems like a waste to me of what could have been a very interesting plot, as a technomancer and with his powers being incredibly rich and powerful it was only a matter of waiting, but with this he has almost everything resolved, but with his change of backstory.

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11 months ago
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Yes, he is a stupid protagonist, there is no good reason for him to get involved with the volturi.

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11 months ago
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without a human form, but it can shrink in size, since being very large can be a nuisance.

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11 months ago
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I wonder if the trials part and the prison incident were really orchestrated or he just painted himself as a victim in his own mind?

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11 months ago
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The mental library is like one more power. I don't understand why the authors mention a specific number of powers only to later give them many more.