Writing quality is wack, syntax isn't that good and we hear the same words over and over. Power ups just come from the most basic things making it so he'll be OP in no time. All the characters are one dimensional and nonsensical, I mean what's the point of a stepmother paying servants to torment a stepson with a dead mother and mental issues, his father also gave up on him, he's not going to inherit anything so what's the point. Give a reason for your characters actions and not make them do stuff just to fit the plot.
Their names are pretty similar
The only reason to remain here would be to spend even more time with his family, but that was not a necessity anymore. Yersi was happy, Orthar was gone, and no one else from his family would die in the next millennia. This was the perfect time to return.
Lightning Is the Only Way
Eastern · Warmaisach
He left like ten chapters ago, have you even been reading
The only reason to remain here would be to spend even more time with his family, but that was not a necessity anymore. Yersi was happy, Orthar was gone, and no one else from his family would die in the next millennia. This was the perfect time to return.
Lightning Is the Only Way
Eastern · Warmaisach
Having made his decision, he picked one of the seals from the drawer and stored it in his ring, before sinking into the floor using phase. Lin Mu had been continually using phase for more than an hour now, along with his other skills. This had led to quite a lot of consumption of his spirit qi.
Walker Of The Worlds
Eastern · Grand_Void_Daoist
Noah laughed. "Yea...pretend. I guess even you don't think you're a baseball player."
The Hitting Zone
Sports · half_empty
lol
"Stop being weird!"
Lightning Is the Only Way
Eastern · Warmaisach
*dinner
"Master diner have been served"
Blood demon leveling
Fantasy · zad1333
why is he surprised
"This Yulong was a spy!?" Lin Mu was shocked.
Walker Of The Worlds
Eastern · Grand_Void_Daoist