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2018-02-02 Joint United States
I think the premise of the story is pretty good. But I feel like the process of how we went from Death---->System----> War Is kind of sloppy causing the entire first chapter to lose some rhythm of what could be a great chapter. I'm not how to fix it but I do think something could be done to fix the flow of the story.
ch 0 1 Rebirth
Video Games · MrEuripedes
Final Fantasy 14
I'm sorry to say, I'm officially going to be dropping this story. If someone would like to keep the story going with there own work please contact me and we can discuss on how we would like to proceed. In the meantime I'll be looking to start a new piece soon.
Video Games · ObsidianRain
ive also have 2 chapters currently finished with a third on the way. they are currently only released on patreon but im hoping ill have them ready fir WN released soon.
I'm sorry to say, I'm officially going to be dropping this story. If someone would like to keep the story going with there own work please contact me and we can discuss on how we would like to proceed. In the meantime I'll be looking to start a new piece soon.
Video Games · ObsidianRain
Miralukan. Highly sensitive and "Rare" race
"Yes, My race is highly sensitive to the force, and through the force when I was meditating our homelands. A signal or pulse if you will was released calling everyone that I've found a new home."
Video Games · ObsidianRain
He has not
Diesel was using this armor to destroy tanks and walkers without a problem while stream rolling any and all droids in between him and the next tank. While also being escorted by Rayath and a couple other Valkyries outfitted in a much lighter version of an Mandalorian outfit. Colored in pitch Dark Red lining with deep blue stripes flowing down the arms. The suit covered most of her vitals basically alloying her to move at high-speed leaving there joints exposed. However, with the force they could easily deflect anything that was to be shot in their direction because of the limited amount of vulnerabilities they had. Most of the Valkyries wore Mask rather than full helmets however they carried the standard T in the middle of them. If one didn't know better their outfits could easily be mistaken as a Sith one. Today, the Valkyries were going to make their very first public appearance to the Republic and most Separatist.
Video Games · ObsidianRain
im going to try a FF14 with a knight themed so far i have 2.5 chapters. One completely done and the other is some reworking and being rewritten.
I'm sorry to say, I'm officially going to be dropping this story. If someone would like to keep the story going with there own work please contact me and we can discuss on how we would like to proceed. In the meantime I'll be looking to start a new piece soon.
Video Games · ObsidianRain
This might be another thing. I didn't really consider this. Thank you for the outlook.
I'm sorry to say, I'm officially going to be dropping this story. If someone would like to keep the story going with there own work please contact me and we can discuss on how we would like to proceed. In the meantime I'll be looking to start a new piece soon.
Video Games · ObsidianRain
I don't know if its a fact of losing inspiration or more so along the lines. If hard to keep throwing time at something. Although I liked the story for it. I've attempted a couple times to keep the story going and the I've lost entire chapters/work due to power outages or just unfortunate circumstances. So I've wrote the next chapter 4 different times and the work was gone. So it became exhausting. So, In the end I'll be starting a new story with a different format.(Patreon as a option) If it goes pretty well. I may start the rest of Spartan on Patreon but I'll make no promises toward this.
I'm sorry to say, I'm officially going to be dropping this story. If someone would like to keep the story going with there own work please contact me and we can discuss on how we would like to proceed. In the meantime I'll be looking to start a new piece soon.
Video Games · ObsidianRain
True Freedom [ hinted at in the paragraph]
ch 48 Advancement
Video Games · ObsidianRain
At the very least the I want to promise I'll never prematurely drop without warning.
ch 126 Proper Update / Info Please take 2 mins to read
Video Games · ObsidianRain
Wounded could mean any sort of injury while seriously injured is life threatening
"37,000 deaths, 2300 wounded and 4123 seriously injured sir."
Video Games · ObsidianRain
mmm.... it was much shorter. When the chapters were first release (first 3) they were less then 250 words however now (rewritten again) are over 300
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Video Games · ObsidianRain
not really, at some point i would like to come back to it
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Video Games · ObsidianRain
the beginning was edited but the size was increased
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Video Games · ObsidianRain
sorry atm the discord is closed as it never got active i however will get to all messages on here
Discord - https://discord.gg/ZZ4kFQA
Video Games · ObsidianRain
no i took everything off patreon and posted here as a mass release a while ago
I'm sorry to say, I'm officially going to be dropping this story. If someone would like to keep the story going with there own work please contact me and we can discuss on how we would like to proceed. In the meantime I'll be looking to start a new piece soon.
Spartan In Star Wars (Dropped)
Video Games · ObsidianRain