Master_of_Blood

Master_of_Blood

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Creator and Master of the Blood Dao

2018-01-05 Joint Sweden
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Master_of_Blood
3 years ago
Commented

I havent seen it, so it is appreciated, and I am planning to watch it.

Master_of_Blood
Master_of_Blood
3 years ago
Commented

There are also quite a few spelling errors, and vapital letters at the wrong place. All in all, it is rough around the edges, but it is interessting, so I hope you continue writing.

Master_of_Blood
Master_of_Blood
3 years ago
Commented

Also also, you wrote im, ”I” is always supposed to be in capital letter when it is used as a pronoun, and there is supposed to be an ’ between i and m, like I’m.

Master_of_Blood
Master_of_Blood
3 years ago
Commented

Also, you put a capital letter after a comma, letters after a comma should be lower case ones.

Master_of_Blood
Master_of_Blood
3 years ago
Commented

There is not aupposed to be any space between a word and a “?”, “!”, “,”. For example the first sentence goes “… 1 day ?”, it should actually be “… 1 day?”. The same thing is done later with exclamation marks and commas, and should also be fixed.

Master_of_Blood
Master_of_Blood
3 years ago
Commented

You are using the wrong pronouns a lot, it is him for males and her for females

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Master_of_Blood
Master_of_Blood
3 years ago
Replied to Dao_of_Melancholy

Isn’t it impossible to have a innate spirit power of over 10?

Master_of_Blood
Master_of_Blood
3 years ago
Replied to Flamberg

It is a part of the glyph semblance that all schnees have.

Master_of_Blood
Master_of_Blood
3 years ago
Commented

That last lIne, I laughed so hard. It was beautiful.