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Thanks for taking to the time to read my review and respond. Like I said, I really like the starting chapters and I thought your wish was a good balance between powerful without being OP. Your way of responding to criticism really makes me optimistic about how this fic could turn out, even if I don’t end up getting back into it. I’ll make sure to check back in periodically, so just keep doing you man.

This story started off really well. The main character logically laid out good plans, acted on them to the best of his ability, and started progressing. I liked him not having a super strong ability off rip, giving him something to work towards. Unfortunately, the author stated taking this story down the crack route. Between incredibly goofy dialogue and bringing in annoying aspects like characterizations from the Abridged series I’ve lost nearly all enjoyment for this fic. I guess I’ll check it out every once in a while to see where it’s progressed.

Writing Quality - 4* Updating Stability - 3* Story Development - 2* Character Design - 2* World Background - 5* This story initially started off great. The writing was very solid, with minimal spelling errors and improper formatting. Nothing egregious. The author had a good grasp of the world and characters, at least at first. The problems came around the 20 chapter mark. I’m sure the other reviews would have clued you into it, but around that time is when the author just has the characters act incredibly contrived and stupid. It feels as the author using his hand to force canon characters to come to be, even if at the time it makes no sense from a narrative point. I only kept reading a few chapters after that. I just couldn’t suspend my belief of how the characters were acting to continue reading. It’s a huge shame since the start of this novel was very good. The progression was going at a good pace, the writing was better than 95% of the crap you find here and the author really knew what he was talking about. Very sad to see the story go down the way it did.