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The Almighty Derek (18+)
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Derek was deprived of love as a child never really had it as an adult with his siblings after his 2 year old relationship ended because his girlfriend chose his rival over him. so when he met Hazel his supposed assistant, sparks starts flying
Will Derek nurture this feelings or try to smother it??
and how will Hazel handle Derek's temperament and paranoia??
Read to find out!!!!!!
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The story is really great, i liked almost everything about the girl hazel but if you could add some more expense and add some more character into the story it will be great and also writing is different and unique but a bit more detailing will spark up the novel! you are doing amazing! please keep improving and dont give up i am going to read this till end!
I can already tell that it's going to be a interesting story. The way you portrayed the characters were fabulous. I can't wait to see what happens next.
(Read till Chapter 3) There are some grammar and spelling errors here and there, it would be good to fix those soon to make reading easier but other than that, the story pace was fairly good, not too fast or slow. They character was memorable, it's interesting. Keep up the good work author.
This book has the potential to be great, but the writer needs to work on 'showing not telling'. Instead of giving the main character's entire background in one paragraph, it could have been slowly revealed throughout the book. While this may be the writer's first book, it's not terrible, but there is definitely room for a lot of improvement.
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