/ Anime & Comics / One Piece: Starting in God Valley as a Slave
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Carl from the Earth traveled to the world of pirates and became the prey of Celestial Dragons in Valley of Gods.
There is no system, no cheat. The only way Carl can think of to break the game is to find the best Devil Fruit hidden in Valley of Gods!
However, he originally targeted the Paw-Paw Fruit, but discovered Dark-Dark Fruit!
Just when he was thinking about slaying the Celestial Dragons in the future, Garling, the leader of the Knights of God, suddenly appeared in front of him and told him....
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Despite the idea being great, The writing needs a lot of improvement grammar wise, especially the descriptive language that's being used. Big shots like Big mom, garling, Rocks or whoever shouldn't be stunned and shocked at every little action that happens, no matter how small it is. For dialogue I would recommend going back to one piece and analyzing how characters actually talk because as of right now they behave like OC's. This is by far the hardest part of writing one piece fanfics. On the otherside I do commend you for sticking to a consistent upload schedule and appreciate the use of correct punctuation for the most part. And I do have one small suggestion that might sound silly: I don't think the mc name 'carl' fits one piece at all. So maybe something like 'Carlos' might? Or maybe give him a nickname to not ruin immersion. Please don't be discouraged by my review and keep writing
Really good story, at least the best of my fanfics. I like that it's not a canon time, the MC's unusual ethnicity, pretty quick development, he's become powerful, but it's grounded so it's not like it just fell out of the sky
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I like mc devil fruit but this story feel like there little element of young master it will be great if u change something that are too chinese. 😁😁😁 this ff are great overall
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Primero para esta aventura. Depósito la fe con un granito de arena (y para motivarte a que sigas esta magnifica obra muy poco vista en estas paginas) muy buen comienzo, espero verla terminada. No te desmotives en el tema de personas porque vendrán a su debido tiempo. Nada más que decir nos vemos y ojala la obra llegue lejos. Ánimos 💪
I am enjoying this story quite a lot and o am looking forward to further development. Truly your OCs and use of story characters are great and they flow well together. I especially enjoy your depiction of Kuma.
The story is really good, the author is enthusiastic about continuing to update it
The story begins in a timeline before the start of the anime, which is quite common in One Piece fanfics. It's a little difficult to determine the MC's personality, the only objective he has so far is revenge on a certain person, in addition to some characters appearing to be very submissive towards the MC. So far (chapter 50+-) the novel is going well, but it needs to delve deeper into the protagonist and give a little more personality to the secondary characters.
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So far, this is already one of the top 5 one piece fanfic I have read. story and character building is surprisingly great, it is very interesting. update rate is good too. KEEP UP THE GOOD WORK.
Enjoying the fic so far. MC has pretty good development and we get to see a different side to the one piece world.
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This is great so far and I really can't wait for more and the confrontation with the various known people. Ofc this fic interests me greatly because I have wondered if Monkey D. Dragon could have made it to fleet Admiral and then maneuver the navy away from the WG somehow, instead of what ever he is doing now.
This count as decent translation compared to MTL. And the novel itself is good but sadly, the novel suffer from Chinese author disease of 'greedy', prolonging and dragging the story to the point nonsense. It has the same fate like "build the strongest beast pirate(kaido's brother)" novel. It's really really pity such good 200 chapter novel just get ruined because of this disease.
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Great story so far and the world building around the secrets of the celestial dragons and dark fruit is amazing. if it keeps up this pace it might just get better and better. can't wait for how everything will play out. If i have to say something bad about it is that gion is somehow the same age as akainu/ kizaru. they 3 including kuzan were known as monsters within the marine and somehow she thought that she is better than them which seems weird and off but AU things doing AU things
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