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Land Warrior: Discontinued
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I love this story. It feels like being inside a real action movie. Even though author's vocabulary is apparently limited, still you can easily visualize what's happening. To be honest, there can be found a fair amount of grammatical and punctuational problems, which I think is fine because the author is ESL. If you ignore these problems, I think you can get entertained reading this. Anyways it's better than most of the warfare novels in WN. So highly recommend it!
The settings and the names of the places are very familiar. This is good. That means many can relate to the story.There were minimal grammatical errors, but don't worry, the story is understandable...Keep it up!
Author is not milking for chapters, not one bit. Though he is providing you, the reader with a lot of explanations in the first few chapters where there are ten things going on at the same time. Otherwise, the story is enjoyable, one just needs to use a lot of imagination and everything will work out fine.
Your story is good, though. You have so many informations and details but because you can visualize the story so good, I don't feel like I'm reading a documentary. All in all, It's good! Keep up the good work!
It was a nice story with a bit of writing instability. It can be fixed and learned, it was still understandable even though. But I hope the author support me as well with my first novel. Sending reviews to each and every one.
The story is really interesting but there are some mistakes in writing quality that might bother some people. Besides that quite a bit of important knowledge is in a info dump in the authors notes at the end of chapter one.
First of all the writing quality is good so we don't need to rack our own brains to understand the phrases and can enjoy the story. This point is enough to read it. After that the plot is also kind of unique giving an extra point to the story. I hope I enjoy reading it further in the future... All the best
This is definitely a good story. Its worth it to read it and I believe that the story has alot of potential as long as the writing part of this can be solved which the author seems to be doing in the later chapters
So here's my take on the story: It's actually pretty decent. I'm not saying it's perfect, but it's one of those that really stood out to me more than the typical stuff you see in this platform. At the start of the chapter, I admit, I wasn't too immersed when I first came in (with some poor sentences here and there) -but holy hell did the later parts did. The events unfolding, the battles at each front, the ambushes -it felt like the author really knows what he was doing, like he has this mini-map within his brain telling him of all the positions both sides were in. For me, it's not the "next big thing," but it doesn't have to be. The story is good and solid. The characters, such as Jose and the many soldiers, really feel real. I can also tell of you're enthusiasm in writing this story. I mean, not many writers opt for a war simulation kind of novel, and it's not really that popular, but you wrote it anyways. I tip my hat to you, Mr. Author, for crafting a solid story.
Wooww. It's jaw dropping. I RECOMMEND IT! It's refreshing than those novels who have cliche stories and self satisfaction. So far I'm in the 6th chapter now. Peace had just returned to the world but there's still remnant of it. It was like how the history of the real world, this novel is a reflection of it. Or more than that.They struggled to protect their own land as well as their loved ones. The author portrayed perfectly each character. I'm still waiting for what will happen. I felt like watching an action movie. Good job author! Please continue writing ^^
An excellent and concise story of infantry in an modern-future environment. Chapters are well paced and cleanly written. Good job. Worth Reading.
I like everything about this story from the start. The narration is excellent in its own way. ☺ The author is doing good job I hope author could keep this pace in future😊 I'll review again after reading more chapters, every chapter is new revelation.😇 ....
Love the world you built in the auxiliary chapter and the way you provide intricate details about the locations, time etc. Many grammatical mistakes but duh we are humans and all of us make mistakes. Looking forward to read it again if you are rewriting the chapters, even though the genre isn't really my type.
There's just something about the way the author has written this that causes it to be wonderfully immersive. Even from the very start, in the auxiliary chapter, the world building is already fantastic. Though there are a few grammatical and spelling mistakes, nothing too big that detracts too much from the enjoyment of the read. The thing that really draws readers in is the fantastic way the author draws you into the world that the characters are in. The characters are believable and seem well written as of chapter 10. The plot is progressing at a steady pace, drawing the reader in. Keep up the good work, author! Hoping to read more soon. :)
Not your typical novel, if anything it's like a very detailed RPS story. You are immersed into a wat with real people rather then he characters that can spawn somewhere after death. Interesting not my cup of tea but when I was ready I felt like I need a bowl of popcorn and can of soda. Mind you I got up to the end of chapter 4. The writing though, a lot of in's in your story should be on's. I find my phone does the same thing, it auto corrects and drives me up the wall. It is time consuming but try rereading your chapters before posting. Also some words are redundant or could be tried down. He said with a sigh could easily be changed to he sighed. There are a few more and I had to reread the paragraphs to make sense of the conversation. Nothing wrong with taking your time with things. Your characters are there to voice their opinions and tell their stories not repeat what you wrote a few words before. So expand on what they say or feel. You have the ability to paint an entire world, with nations and cities I can see you bringing more life into your characters when they are not fighting.
I liked it, the beginning was tough with the many grammatical mistakes but the story made up for it. The characters felt realistic and the world they were living in too. In good novels i can immerse myself in bad ones I can’t. In this novel I could, which is a clear sign for me that the author is doing things right. Only thing is the grammar, maybe try getting an editor or someone who can speak and help you correct by yourself!
Writing Quality: 2/5 There were many grammar errors throughout this. I believe they can be improved upon, but as a native English speaker, I found them distracting. It took a good deal of effort to read past these. The main issues are punctuation as well as tense shifting. That said, for Webnovel, I believe this isn't anything too abnormal. Stability of Updates: 5/5 I don't comment on this. Story Development: 4/5 The first chapter is well paced. Introduces the characters, providing just enough information to allow the reader to visualize the scene. The action comes in at just the right time, as well, propelling the plot forward. Character Design: 3/5 The characters are varied, which is great. That said, I don't get a sense anything particularly unique about them from the beginning. I think some more fleshing out or description beyond just physical characteristics would go a long way to adding life to them. World Background: 4/5 The world is intriguing, and there are hints at the beginning that make you as a reader ask questions about the place. I think that's a good thing. Overall, 3.6/5. I had to stop at chapter 2 because of the writing quality, but if you can get past that, or if the author improves the grammar, I think this would be a good read.
Writing Quality: 4/5 I can't say that this is not a well-written book. The reason why I graded it lower than it should is because of its disorganized paragraphs. I left an example in the first chapter for a more detailed insight. Stability Update: 4/5 Updates are still unstable but it is understandable as it was just starting. Story Development: 4.5/5 the story development was good and reeled me in by every chapter. It is commendable and interesting. Character Design: 4/5 This category should be 5 star but since there are only a few chapters published, I'm not sure about the character's stability. But for the 8 chapters that were out, characters are interesting and I could tell that they feel real by their train of thoughts and how they speak. World Background: This is where it amazes me. I like the fact that the story is set in the Philippines (please correct me if I'm wrong) which makes me proud and also interested at the same time. Overall, this story is interesting so far. It is action-packed with an interesting storyline. If I'm correct that they are Pinoy, well then, it makes me appreciate the hard work of our country's soldier. I'm adding it to my library and hopefully, see it rise one day. Best of luck!
To be said, the amount of detailing given to this story is absolutely amazing. The way the author build the world and the story is highly appreciable. The writing quality was amazing too. The author here is able to bring a sense of realism into it. It really feels like history of our world and not just fiction. Good work!
A very involving story with lots of detail. The author does an excellent job of making you feel that everything happens for a reason, and rarely skips over anything of import. My favourite element is how the author conveys information in a very natural way, and I don't feel like I'm just reading walls of text. I haven't read much modern warfare styled web novels, but if this is anything to go by, then I will start reading more. I very much recommend giving this story a read.