In MHA with a Pokemon quirk

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Ivan_The_Terrible

Hello shamless author here. This is my first time doing this so i hope you like it

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breaker_nova

please make him get female pokemon like Gardevoir and other for laughs and stuff.............................................................

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GoMagikarp

There's definitely a story in here worth reading, unfortunately it's buried pretty deep. Besides the grammar which is okayish, if you ignore the total lack of capitalization, there's a lot of enjoy. Or there was. What started out as a goofy story with a well defined and solid system quickly spiraled out of control. Every chapter the author added more and more changes to what worked perfectly fine until the whole thing was a cluster**** of way too many ideas and powers. Needless to say, the MC is OP beyond belief and I don't even recognize what his quirk is any more. If the author had just let themselves continue with their original idea it would have been fine. Not perfect, but a good read. However, it feels like they're pandering to the spastic 12 year olds that scream OMG MEGA EVOLUTIONS! I WANT LEGENDARIES! and lost most of the features that made it worth reading.

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EspersLv6

Horrible writing. Ok, the author writes for fun, but it is right to look at it with a critical eye. If he just wanted to have fun he could just write, without publishing. Furthermore, it is right that a reader can judge a work Writing Quality: 2/5. I wanted to put one on, but since the author himself said to write for fun, I can give a 2. He knows he's not a writing teacher and doesn't even want to look like one. I don't write very well myself, but as a reader I would like to understand what I read. There are POV changes every 3 lines... The publications are slow, but being a Fan fiction and writing for fun, I put 3 stars. This is because he writes when he wants, the solution I like best. He doesn't write unwillingly, perhaps even ruining the story he has in mind, just because readers ask for the chapters. Story Development: 3/5 Good storytelling pace, neither too fast nor too slow. The story moves at the right pace. What happens is another matter. Too confusing story, given that the development of its power is too random. World Background: 2/5. No description, but it's fictional, so don't expect too much. Character Design: 2/5. Protagonist written with the feet. Decent father and mother. I conclude by saying that I will probably not read the rest of the work if it ever continues.

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OkayVelvet

Your writing is worse than a preschooler, my god. This idea is wasted on this trash novel it's really hard to look at ಠ_ಠ. 👎👎👎👎👎👎 🤢🤢🤢🤢🤢🤢🤢🤢🤢🤢🤢🤢🤢

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yokedjaguar

My only problem is the parents, I get they said he had to train himself but to completely disappear feels a little weird and I wish he could have more transformations but its understandable to have it fixed to 6 so it's not that big of a deal, besides that everything else is really good. Good luck and hope you don't drop.

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Aaden_Adamski

this is good but it was abandoned which brings it down quite a bit

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CONNER_Jackson

more please really good story and good mc

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ghostensaop

love the story

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kweber

please write more I need to read it!!! this book is amazing and it's so in depth with the looks transformations and powers. Great job author.

LV 14

kweber

please write more I really enjoyed it along. I want more chapters pls.👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍

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Greg_Vitug

Very gooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooo0oooooooooooooooooooooooooooOoooooooooooooooooooooooooooooodddd!

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Daoist592663

I goddam love you for creating this story and i really hope you upload again soon pls this i fucking love your work [img=recommend][img=update]

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Henrique_Paiao

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omnigamergt

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Henrique_Paiao

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Felix_Toaza_Sempai

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Nmastte

too cursed for me, just the word "kawaii", the father who is beaten by her wife is too funny ..... It's a comedy but it's just heavy ... (translated with google translate)

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Reykun

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