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A shadow guard from another world who was reincarnated into the modern world. What will happen to her after seeing all those things that she never even imagined in her past life? The one time when she was exploring the room she was in, she saw an unusual mouse-shaped object which seems to glow. The computer mouse seemed like a threat to her, she rushes to kill it but as soon as she came in touch all the memory of the previous owner gushes into her head.
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Its ok for me i like the plot i read your novel because of the title then i saw the synopsis so yeah i gave it a chance and i like it but I can say that your a novice writer is it your first time i guess but its nice its pretty long but i think the lower part should be on the second chapter so that you can have more chapter cuz its already pretty long plus you have a tag of reincarnation on first so put the lower part in the second dont add more there
I liked the plot very much, but reading it is tough since I guess this is your first novel and you're a novice in writing. There are many grammatical errors and the structures of your sentences are lacking too. It's like you have it in you mind and can't write it properly to express it. Keep writing though, practice makes perfect 🍀
You really need to read more novels and write more, so gradually you will improve. Don't be demotivated by this rating cause I will try to assist you to take the best out in you. The writing has so many typos, not good punctuation, paragraph changing, and many more errors. You haven't described her feeling, the surrounding, and her movement properly. The only thing that's good is updates in the chapter there are just 3 chapters but I am sure the author will keep up with updates. The title was so interesting that it caught my attention, the plot was pretty good and I see the potential. But some parts I had to read thrice to understand it. And character design is terrible, she acts like a different person in every chapter. So I suggest you write about your character somewhere note down her flaws, her fear, what she is good at, her skill and everything. Also, describe how female lead looks properly. You should start reading more novels to under how to write. You definitely have the imagination but you don't know how to express it in words. I will keep checking on this book to see how much you improved, Best of luck!
ok i like your plot its good you have a great idea there but dont know how to fully show it as I read the quality of the writing is bad but your trying to fix that i see in the first chapter so ill wait to see a the corrected one
the plot is really great, I like it. The author's writing style is also okay, but needs to learn to express the character's environment a little more. All I can say is goodluck in your subsequent updates.
The title was intriguing and it made me curious about what this story will be. The synopsis catches my attention the same way the title captivates me. The plot was unique. But, editing is needed here and there, for example the proper punctuation and capitalization and the grammar looks fine for me the same as the pacing of the story. Also, the description at the beginning was good but, too much information was given at the very beginning which might be a problem. It's fine to give informations but, it should be lessen, since other information regarding the story can be shown in a different way other than the description/narration. Just like what the other authors/editors/coaches always say "Show don't Tell". But other than that the Author did a good job! Good luck and I'm looking forward for the rest of the chapters and on how will Mia's story unfolds as the story goes.
It's really amazing tbh... like how the MC went to another world and is getting confused at some point and then she remembers some stuff she has never been through? it's amazing. Good job Author!
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The author can further improve their writing. It started off with the protagonist transmigration and ending up in a modern world. How bewildered will the protagonist be? Would the previous life have any effect on the mc's way of thinking? I suggest checking out some simple autobiographies then you'll get a better understanding of emotive writing. Keep writing away~:)
Another enthralling, intriguing, and great story I've ever read. The storyline is perfectly planned, the characters also, although a few of the chapters had errors. Well, it's normal, but you can learn it slowly but surely. Despite everything, this such a great book from you, Author. Added it to my library, good luck and I'll be waiting for more chapters.
Its amazing how you created this story I really like it hehehe please update more Since the story is so good I like the story so far cant wait for more updates hehehehe
Amazing! I am really blown away by the uniqueness of the plot. I am enjoying the story. Keep going Skylar and all the best for WSA 2021 awards.
Catchy title!!! It has a promising story that would pique your interest from the beginning. I'm looking forward to more chapters and funny scenes.
This one also has a nice plot... comedy! I hope to see this book be completed! I added this in my library to follow the fl's journey!
great job Author! I really love Mia's character, I easily made an imagery about her and everything, about her fuss on a mouse, I like how you write your novels as well, more updates and nice job!
Really impressive story author I really like Mia and her fuss with a mouse 😂😂😂 just a few mistakes here and there however it has potential