I am Rimuru Tempest (Another Version)

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BonVoyage

All right, proper review now that I am up to chap 61. The first ten chaps are somewhat rushed, with the first four being the worst in terms of pacing. After which, the pacing stabilizes. Quality? Pretty good, I would say. I admit that I use Gpt to help me edit from time to time, and in the first few chaps it was really noticable. But after the first ten-ish chaps is when I get an actually good prompt for it so that if I end up using it for editing it doesn't make the story robotic. I don't always use it, but when I do, it's not too in your face. (I hope) For cases when Gpt is used, it is purely to edit the already written text. I don't use it to write out paragraphs. What's the point in writing then? It's still predominantly my own writing, and I avoid using it whenever possible. However, it does help to fix up paragraphs and organize the structure slightly Story Development? Pretty good, while it follows the rails of the original story, I beleive I do enough changes to make the story my own. And post Walpurgis, it will mostly, if not completely abandon the rails of the original. Using the world to further the story. Character design? Pretty happy with how it turned out too. Shuna was a tad rushed, but then I work on her and expand on her character. Same for most of the relevant characters. I feel like I did a relatively good job on developing them. World background? I mean, it's tensura. But yes, I am being pretty careful not to break the world and follow the rules already laid out world while writing. Mistakes happen here and there, but for the most part I try to keep stuff as good as it can be. Now, onto the prophet stuff. A lot of people didn't like it. That's fine. Not for you. While not a major plot point post Orc disaster, it still shows up from time to time. And it is somewhat relevant to events that will happen in the future.

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BonVoyage

Hello everyone! Author here with my legally mandated review. This is a rewrite of my original story. But I do have a lot of changes planned as I go. You could say that this is more like a fanfic of my fanfic lol. Anyways, I hope all of you enjoy.

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HornyStarX

A good story so far, I just hope you won't drop the novel [Google Translate]

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Dark_PersonJJ

I always wondered why OG Rimuru do not have a funking Harem, when in FF such as this one he has it.? Heck he is also from Slime Race, who do not have gender at all in this story to.!!! but you still want to give him bunch of waifus, Btw will Suphia become his wife to.? i like her a lot since i saw her the first time watching anime, she is a tomboy and she is also nice and kind and Has lots of honor plus she is strong and Has great looks to.

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Kiyan_Tribe

Dang it Bas! I wanted to be the first review. But anyway if you wanna read a good Tensura fic , read this one. I read the previous version many times and this one is way better from the start. Looking forward to more.

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theogbasilisk

Interesting start so far, looking forward to seeing how the story changes due to our protagonist's interference.

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ice_stream

Nice fanfic,i like these characters,but sometimes there have boring chapters,but without them we can't continue story

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The_Best_3329

Well first it’s a bit too rushed for me reads more like a summary than a story. Second 4 chapters in and he is thinking with his D already in your first story i could tolarate since I was interested in the powerprogression but here it ticks me off. Also he doesn’t have human hormones so things that manly happen bc of hormones and not bc of thought (like morals should behave differently) Also the fact that he wants a harem is different than actively going for it or it just happening wanting one in your head is one thing going for it makes me question his character and it happening is a result of majin having a different culture. Also I hope there will be no reincarnators und the harem since that would be very hard to believe. Well this is mostly a rant about the things that would destroy the novel for me sorry if it’s all over the place.

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balthazar_lee

--------Me like story very much.--------

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YourDad_

I thought this version would be boring & full of plot holes BUT imagine my surprise when i started reading this and found it really written so beautifully..

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Vintot26

I need more of this good book. I don't normally give reviews, but this? This is the best book I've read so far. Kudos to you author, you did well! 👏

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Sergio_Navarrete

It´s really good, you can clearly see the improvements from the previous version. Keep it up author!

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Hunter_Valcarce

I don't know I feel like it's pretty good. I feel like you're missing some details slow down in some areas there and there like what happened to Gail's son did he die I feel like something's Irish.I do like extra details of slime diary I should not be a question I should be scattered in all in the chapters you know a few people opinions there anymore . will building to understand how people feel and the characters think. what's going on in the world we have the progress is in the town in the world

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LeonToralla

One of the best Tensura fics I've read. The author has a good knowledge of the lore and knows how to apply it, the story obviously follows the canon as it is the MC within the original MC but it deviates to improve and be more entertaining. I like the relationship between the characters, especially the few possible members of the harem. Also, so far there is no gender bender or shape shifting which for me is already a big win. I totally recommend this fic, hoping that the author doesn't abandon it and gives us more chapters. [img=update][img=update][img=More pls][img=More pls][img=More pls]

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Game_B_Roll

This is one of those fanfics in which is the original series but the type that gives us what we want. I loved Tensura but hated the MC's personality! This is the tensura I wanted. The author does add his original ideas which I loved so it ain't just a wish fuilment novel which I thought it would be like the last version (Didn't read it just skimmed it to get an idea how this novel will be this rewrite felt less wish fulfilment) Especially love the update stability with good chapter length. ******** By the why I have only read the webnovel complete not the light novel. So was wondering if like the webnovel the otherworldlers figure out world travel and can return to earth. Later on Veldora and Ramiris go to another world post apocalyptic themed for fun. So was hoping you add that because I didn't like how that arc went although I know that way this novel will be a long project.

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MARS_20

To start I must write that I haven't read many stories about Tensura but this one has become my favorite and I don't think that will change anytime soon. At first it seemed to me that events were happening too fast but as I progressed that was no longer the case. Although the story follows the same main line, I really like how the protagonist and Raphael do things, regarding the romance and the harem I appreciate that Rimiru does something about it and doesn't sit there indecisive like in the novel. Continue the great work author.

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Vaneford

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Av1master

Man one of the best Tensura fan-fic out there I have read it’s pretty good till the latest chapter, hope u continue this and don’t drop mid-way

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Pixham

I read your first fanfic and decided to read this one, so far everything is very interesting, I'm waiting for the continuation[img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend]