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Synopsis
When a retired old man got a chance to reincarnate to Marvel x Harry Potter x and some other novels
*Got too many dose of Fan-fiction and said to myself, why can't I make one?
*Don't own the image
*Goal? to get a million words
*Updates? Sporadically
-- Classement
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- Développement de l’histoire
- Conception des personnages
- Contexte du monde
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No reviews yet? I'll put a review on my own novel!! Third attempt at trying to make my own stories to life. Sometimes it will be too chaotic, cause I have sooo many ideas..
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It's a good summary of some of your fav fics blending together into a big mess. At first it's hp and marvel, that swiftly escalates to the Adams family... The grammar could use some work tough and the story could use some plot. Right now the MC is pretty much just a spectator.
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Ill be no seat I was not expecting much, but it’s surprisingly good. Every once in a while the author loses track of what he is writing. At times I feel like whole sentences or certain key words are missing as I have to infer from the rest of the paragraph to figure out what happened. Especially when there is the line where apparently Harris measures up Charles before leaving Harry and Ron with him. Instead we are just told that Harris looks at him and suddenly Charles thinks to himself, ‘Giants’. Then explaining to Harry what had happened. Maybe instead of taking a look the author could have mentioned that Hagrid looked guardedly at Charles before telling him to take Harry and Ron. Otherwise great work, please take your time and do well. God bless.
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What you've written is good so far. The writing is good and I can't see any mistakes. I like the world back ground where you tried to make as less plot holes as possible,and you've explained really well how everything came to be instead of most fan fics where the world's are just there.(if that makes any sense) The only thing that a I have to criticize,but just mostly on my part is in the midle chapters it got a bit confusing in who the main charachter was.did he get sealed did he reancarnate again.what it him or his disciple that meet death. Well keep up the good work.
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