Errand Boy

LV 10

CrimsonWalker

Your use of english and words are pretty solid. But in terms of originality and creativity isn't really up there, nothing hooked me into your novel. Your paragraphs are occassionally too long and makes it hard to keep my attention to read. I suggest just think about what your theme is going to be and even make something unique about your novel. Maybe adding another dub genre might be better. Action comedy isn't strong enough to buff ur story.

LV 11

Lighthouse

The premise itself is fairly interesting. Drawing from reincarnation and isekai tropes to create a world where people can be summoned multiple times. Unfortunately, it begins to fall apart from there as the MC is introduced. We never really get to know our MC, only learning that he is often summoned and considered totally useless in his original world.for whatever reason. The story then throws us right into the main plot, but becomes rather confusing and jumbled only a few chapters in. By the time it gets back on track everything has changed. The characters that have been introduced could become interesting in the future. But for now their character development is being rushed and much of the fun of watching them level and grow has been ignored in order to allow them to survive in a world where repeat heroes and reincarnated powerhouses roam free. Overall the story could certainly improve in the future. It has a strong premise and an exciting world. But for now it needs more worldbuilding, character development, and a good editor.

LV 10

SleepyFish

Hello, author here. I'd appreciate constructive criticism for my novel via review or comments. Please feel free to leave a bad review as long as it's within reason!

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