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A fanfic of black clover with the protagonist with space magic
First time writing to train and i choose a fanfic about black clover , so you know how it is , grammar error ...
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The book had its merits, but the grammatical errors were plentiful and you mentioned this in the synopsis, so I won't dwell on this. In the few chapters I read, you used a plethora of adverbs to tell your story. Instead of telling us, show us. Most of your story comprises dialogue. This is good, but could you add further details about the surroundings? I feel like guessing half the time. Making these changes would give your book a remarkable quality.