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Writing quality is mid at best. The main character is like a fucking child. I dont give a shit if his old memories came to him "like a dream" he still got his old memories back. Also he LOVES doing stupid shit like breaking a precious phone thing, and thinking he has more stamina that a FUCKING MONSTER. He then litterally gets stipped in front of a crowd of people and does fight it. Like seriously all he says "NOOOO" but doesnt actually do shit. He has fucking magic strong enough to take them off of him but doesnt use it like a dumbass. Then he sulks. At that point its like bro wanted it.
Great idea just boring to read, I'll read more chapters later but I don't have my hopes up. ...................................................
Great book good oc i love it so much although one chapter a day is a bit sad it feels like it ends quickly but I highly recommend this it’s so much fun to read
the title is misleading as the mc is not a like naruto he gets zero power from the beasts only abilities
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I like the concept and overall theme of the story but the grammar isn’t the best.
This story is well written and has a relaxed and unhurried plot. I hope the author doesn't stop halfway continue your good work. .
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The story seems quite intriguing, the main character was locked up and experimented with, in the same facility as Ultear. I only read a few chapters and it seems to hold potential. The downside to this is the grammar. I do not know if this was written by a non English speaker or translated; what I do know is that the mix-up with the temporal tenses is giving me a headache. There are some other more minor grammatical errors, but the tenses are driving me crazy. Ultimately, I'm forced to drop this for the time being. Pro tip, use grammarly or similar tools for language checking.
The premise of the story is great but the grammar is holding it back tremendously. It was hard to feel invested in the story since it doesn't feel real. This could have been great but bad grammar ruined it
it is an interesting story and at chapter 28, my only complaint so far is a minor plot hole created by the author? The main character mentioned that his communication lacrima broke while traveling and that he could replace it in magnolia, yet despite several chapter after arriving at magnolia he still has not replaced it.
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Good idea terrible execution I highly recommend you avoid this shitty translation.
Really good concept. I like the MC. But the grammar is just god awful. Even compared to other MTL’s it is pretty bad. I literally had to stop reading because of how bad it was even though I like the concept. Also the interactions of the characters is strange. They don’t feel real.
I'm just gonna say the Writing Quality is decent since I can still understand them, the problem however, Is that it gets too exhausting trying to correct the grammar each time in my head while reading. It's good though keep it up
Is this your book or are you translating either way it’s amazing and fun to read highly recommend
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The author has created an interesting story, with a clear path to increasing the main characters power. Although I have to ask, will the main character get access to the ten tail form? It would essentially be a god/demi-god form.
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it's all good but dude did you have to have all these chapters under a pay wall that's not cool bro not cool at all
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Writing quality is mid at best. The main character is like a fucking child. I dont give a shit if his old memories came to him "like a dream" he still got his old memories back. Also he LOVES doing stupid shit like breaking a precious phone thing, and thinking he has more stamina that a FUCKING MONSTER. He then litterally gets stipped in front of a crowd of people and does fight it. Like seriously all he says "NOOOO" but doesnt actually do shit. He has fucking magic strong enough to take them off of him but doesnt use it like a dumbass. Then he sulks. At that point its like bro wanted it.
Great idea just boring to read, I'll read more chapters later but I don't have my hopes up. ...................................................
Great book good oc i love it so much although one chapter a day is a bit sad it feels like it ends quickly but I highly recommend this it’s so much fun to read
the title is misleading as the mc is not a like naruto he gets zero power from the beasts only abilities
Bom !!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!°!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
I like the concept and overall theme of the story but the grammar isn’t the best.
This story is well written and has a relaxed and unhurried plot. I hope the author doesn't stop halfway continue your good work. .
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The story seems quite intriguing, the main character was locked up and experimented with, in the same facility as Ultear. I only read a few chapters and it seems to hold potential. The downside to this is the grammar. I do not know if this was written by a non English speaker or translated; what I do know is that the mix-up with the temporal tenses is giving me a headache. There are some other more minor grammatical errors, but the tenses are driving me crazy. Ultimately, I'm forced to drop this for the time being. Pro tip, use grammarly or similar tools for language checking.
The premise of the story is great but the grammar is holding it back tremendously. It was hard to feel invested in the story since it doesn't feel real. This could have been great but bad grammar ruined it
it is an interesting story and at chapter 28, my only complaint so far is a minor plot hole created by the author? The main character mentioned that his communication lacrima broke while traveling and that he could replace it in magnolia, yet despite several chapter after arriving at magnolia he still has not replaced it.
Spoiler de révélation Good idea terrible execution I highly recommend you avoid this shitty translation.
Really good concept. I like the MC. But the grammar is just god awful. Even compared to other MTL’s it is pretty bad. I literally had to stop reading because of how bad it was even though I like the concept. Also the interactions of the characters is strange. They don’t feel real.
I'm just gonna say the Writing Quality is decent since I can still understand them, the problem however, Is that it gets too exhausting trying to correct the grammar each time in my head while reading. It's good though keep it up
Is this your book or are you translating either way it’s amazing and fun to read highly recommend
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The author has created an interesting story, with a clear path to increasing the main characters power. Although I have to ask, will the main character get access to the ten tail form? It would essentially be a god/demi-god form.
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it's all good but dude did you have to have all these chapters under a pay wall that's not cool bro not cool at all
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