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This story has potential. The writing could use work in terms of structure. The story has some holes in it and it progresses a little too quickly.. I am enjoying he story, but if the author can take their time and develop the details better it would be top tier!
First 20 chapters are decent. I still don’t know what’s happening with the MC, so I wish more were free.
Its a good novel but once you get past the free chapters the grammar dips a little. The mc has anger issues and lashes out at everyone and everything which gets kinda annoying
A novel with a good potential, but the way of writing lacks. It's like some Japanese manga or anime nowadays where the MC is naive/has anger issues/no character development/full of awkwardly portrayal. These are the list that I see it lacks: 1. Story development is not good. Too fast development. MC jumps from one scenario to the other that there are no breathing. 2. The awkwardly interaction of characters. I read and some of the characters are like (I am a mysterious one) vibe.
ohh, not bad, there are issues but i am still enjoying it, i can see that the author is slowly improving with each chapter which is nice to see.
i love this one, hope you get contracted soon so i can support you with a castle
the story is really good, i do have to admit that the writing quality is not the best but and the characters are not described well but other than that, i love it so much.
nice, i love the slow build up, there are areas where i am like huh but it's not bad
some might not like the slow pacing but i love it, shows us the progression properly
Straight from chapter 1, I saw immense potential in this book. And though there aren't many chapters yet, I can already foresee this book reaching the top! Good luck, author!
Author here. just want to point out that my novel has many issues but i plan to keep improving. if you see any area that i could do better, feel free to tell me, either here or in my discord linked in the synopsis.
This story has potential. The writing could use work in terms of structure. The story has some holes in it and it progresses a little too quickly.. I am enjoying he story, but if the author can take their time and develop the details better it would be top tier!
First 20 chapters are decent. I still don’t know what’s happening with the MC, so I wish more were free.
Its a good novel but once you get past the free chapters the grammar dips a little. The mc has anger issues and lashes out at everyone and everything which gets kinda annoying
A novel with a good potential, but the way of writing lacks. It's like some Japanese manga or anime nowadays where the MC is naive/has anger issues/no character development/full of awkwardly portrayal. These are the list that I see it lacks: 1. Story development is not good. Too fast development. MC jumps from one scenario to the other that there are no breathing. 2. The awkwardly interaction of characters. I read and some of the characters are like (I am a mysterious one) vibe.
ohh, not bad, there are issues but i am still enjoying it, i can see that the author is slowly improving with each chapter which is nice to see.
i love this one, hope you get contracted soon so i can support you with a castle
the story is really good, i do have to admit that the writing quality is not the best but and the characters are not described well but other than that, i love it so much.
nice, i love the slow build up, there are areas where i am like huh but it's not bad
some might not like the slow pacing but i love it, shows us the progression properly
Straight from chapter 1, I saw immense potential in this book. And though there aren't many chapters yet, I can already foresee this book reaching the top! Good luck, author!
Author here. just want to point out that my novel has many issues but i plan to keep improving. if you see any area that i could do better, feel free to tell me, either here or in my discord linked in the synopsis.