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Realy good read, one of the most fun One Piece work i read. Thanks author ^.^ [img=recommend] [img=recommend] [img=recommend] [img=recommend]
Good story overall . The premise and plot are well-written. I liked the story of the mc's past and character development very much. Though I have to say , in the beginning, I wasn't a fan of the direction of the story. Even if it's a bit cliche , I felt like the guy should've gone to shimoutsuki Dojo to reach the final level of swordsmanship. Also, I feel like it's a bit risky to make your protagonist someone with family as it can easily be used for hostage situations. Overall, though nice and unique story author.
The story is quite interesting, it got me hook from the start. I just have a small problem, the chapters are short. I just wish that the author would publish longer chapters, but still, the story's interesting to say the least.
4/5/5/4/5 Fantastic story that had me so hooked that I caught up in one session. The setting is very unique and refreshing, with the protagonist taking a path through the plot that I‘ve never seen before. The protag is very much a mixed bag of personality traits, that which makes him compelling to follow. The training to reach the power level he was at when he met Law wasn’t really communicated well at all, though the power progression improves drastically. There were a few moments of wordy dialogues and immersion breaking inner monologues but all-in-all the author does a good job. Character adaptations are done excellently, though I feel Law might be a bit off. But most importantly, finally an author that isn’t scared of making a story outside of the Straw Hats. Check this story out, and thank you for your work author.
He should get the seven Star curse sword comparable to the supreme grade blades has the power of green cursed fire can be absorbed into your body and your body can use swords lashes and sword abilities just really powerful sword which would be better than the great great sword that you wanted him to get and it will be easier to get
Chapters could be a bit longer, but I can live with it. For a first book your doin pretty good.
Keep up the good work! Keep up the good work! Keep up the good work! Keep up the good work! Keep up the good work! Keep up the good work!
Fun read. Nothing really major to complain about. Good grammar and interesting story. Can't wait for the mc to get stronger and see what kind of sword techniques he comes up with. Kinda hoping for some sword technique crossovers but wouldn't mind original techniques. For example, mist breathing would suite the mc pretty well.
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Shameless Author's Review here: (Following the Webnovel tradition) Now, I'm not going to evaluate my work, I'd leave that job for the readers. But what I do want is to note down some of the common things that people have mentioned. So here goes, 1. Honestly, this novel wasn't really a planned writing at first. It was just something I wrote for my own amusement. And that is why there have been some glaring flaws in the first ten or so chapters of this novel. They were mostly because of the fact that I didn't have enough research on the work. For that, I humbly apologize. And I promise that I will rewrite the whole mini-arc after I have finished vol. 2. If you are a new reader, then please bear with me for the first few chapters and I promise it will get better. 2. The chapter length; This was actually made this way because I myself like short chapters better and wanted to get feedback on how the readers felt. And, your reaction has been duly noted. So, from now onwards the chapters will be longer, but not that long. Around 1300-1500 words. 3. For the foreseeable future I'm not going to drop this fanfic. I've already made plans till the events of Wano arc. So, you can be rest assured that I'm not dropping it. Also, in a way, writing this story has become a sort of daily routine for me. Even if only one reader enjoys my work and reads the latest updates daily, then I'd consider that a success. (If there are any unforeseen circumstances and I can't update, then I'll try and inform you guys beforehand.) That's all from my part. I've tried to write the story in mind and if you enjoy my work, then it's enough for me. Thank you.
Realy good read, one of the most fun One Piece work i read. Thanks author ^.^ [img=recommend] [img=recommend] [img=recommend] [img=recommend]
Good story overall . The premise and plot are well-written. I liked the story of the mc's past and character development very much. Though I have to say , in the beginning, I wasn't a fan of the direction of the story. Even if it's a bit cliche , I felt like the guy should've gone to shimoutsuki Dojo to reach the final level of swordsmanship. Also, I feel like it's a bit risky to make your protagonist someone with family as it can easily be used for hostage situations. Overall, though nice and unique story author.
The story is quite interesting, it got me hook from the start. I just have a small problem, the chapters are short. I just wish that the author would publish longer chapters, but still, the story's interesting to say the least.
4/5/5/4/5 Fantastic story that had me so hooked that I caught up in one session. The setting is very unique and refreshing, with the protagonist taking a path through the plot that I‘ve never seen before. The protag is very much a mixed bag of personality traits, that which makes him compelling to follow. The training to reach the power level he was at when he met Law wasn’t really communicated well at all, though the power progression improves drastically. There were a few moments of wordy dialogues and immersion breaking inner monologues but all-in-all the author does a good job. Character adaptations are done excellently, though I feel Law might be a bit off. But most importantly, finally an author that isn’t scared of making a story outside of the Straw Hats. Check this story out, and thank you for your work author.
He should get the seven Star curse sword comparable to the supreme grade blades has the power of green cursed fire can be absorbed into your body and your body can use swords lashes and sword abilities just really powerful sword which would be better than the great great sword that you wanted him to get and it will be easier to get
Chapters could be a bit longer, but I can live with it. For a first book your doin pretty good.
Keep up the good work! Keep up the good work! Keep up the good work! Keep up the good work! Keep up the good work! Keep up the good work!
Fun read. Nothing really major to complain about. Good grammar and interesting story. Can't wait for the mc to get stronger and see what kind of sword techniques he comes up with. Kinda hoping for some sword technique crossovers but wouldn't mind original techniques. For example, mist breathing would suite the mc pretty well.
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Shameless Author's Review here: (Following the Webnovel tradition) Now, I'm not going to evaluate my work, I'd leave that job for the readers. But what I do want is to note down some of the common things that people have mentioned. So here goes, 1. Honestly, this novel wasn't really a planned writing at first. It was just something I wrote for my own amusement. And that is why there have been some glaring flaws in the first ten or so chapters of this novel. They were mostly because of the fact that I didn't have enough research on the work. For that, I humbly apologize. And I promise that I will rewrite the whole mini-arc after I have finished vol. 2. If you are a new reader, then please bear with me for the first few chapters and I promise it will get better. 2. The chapter length; This was actually made this way because I myself like short chapters better and wanted to get feedback on how the readers felt. And, your reaction has been duly noted. So, from now onwards the chapters will be longer, but not that long. Around 1300-1500 words. 3. For the foreseeable future I'm not going to drop this fanfic. I've already made plans till the events of Wano arc. So, you can be rest assured that I'm not dropping it. Also, in a way, writing this story has become a sort of daily routine for me. Even if only one reader enjoys my work and reads the latest updates daily, then I'd consider that a success. (If there are any unforeseen circumstances and I can't update, then I'll try and inform you guys beforehand.) That's all from my part. I've tried to write the story in mind and if you enjoy my work, then it's enough for me. Thank you.