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I'm really looking forward to read more and author thank you creating such a good Mc, I always liked Smart and hard working Mc not the Cliché Mc who asked God for a 'System' to become strong. Without Hard work you won't able to become strong. ..... ..... ..... ..... ..... ..... .....
This fic is a fresh breath of air apart from the usual fics WBNVL has (Chinese trash or one with bad grammar or with a ridiculous and cliched storyline) read till Chapter 10... the fic is amazing .... it's something unique, setting apart from the usual Senju or Uzumaki or uchiha or clanless orphan trope This fic's really tryna cover something else, Yamanaka. the characterization and thought process till now is great... mc is a genius and isn't hiding I hope that author-san will keep on updating and not abandon this Would recommend it 100 percent
A new fic which is good after a LONG time. This platform is almost deprived of food fic nowadays. It's refreshing to see such good fic. the writing the build up the progress is smooth and phenomenal and there are wholesome moments too. A perfect blend. Love it ❤️❤️
One of the best Naruto fan-fics available, I hope the author continues to update and doesn't drop it!
Great Job!! I really like this Fic. Everything feels right, Grammar is nice, and is nothing like those Chinese System stories we see around. Yamanaka is not a clan we see people use that much, that is a plus for me. I hope it keeps getting better.
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This is so well written. I'm definitely going to be interested in this story as well as any others that this author writes.
This novel is worth your time and has zero Chinese cringe so far. I have no complaints and I am enjoying it very much. The characters feels real The setup and build up feels so natural. The mc is very likable and not a MORON he is self driven with higher goals that match his drive.
Love the story and hope you continue uploading it. I hope you get a patreon soon.
Мне очень нравится этот фанфик, [img=Loving it][img=Loving it][img=Loving it][img=Loving it][img=Loving it]жду проду как можно скорее, будут ли дополнительные главы сегодня
I read 2 chapters and i do not understand why this nonsense have 4 star rating (4 and sth) ............................................................
I honestly think this is one of the best Naruto stories I have read. It’s still very early on but the writing quality, world building and character interactions and development have been set to a very high standard. I also think it’s exploring the power system and world in a new and interesting way that I haven’t seen done this way before. I really can’t wait for more and look forward to seeing how the story further develops. Anyways it’s a fantastic read I highly recommend it and I can’t wait for more.
This has the makings of a masterpiece. Not in the greatest of quality. But in pioneering a new path. Like how mushoku tensei elevated isekai. There are new ideas here. And I can’t wait to see much much more. Lastly, for the author, can we have a chapter 0, where we can only give ideas of jutsus and discuss them? I have seen you asking for ideas in chapter comments, but instead of them being spread out in random chapter comments which would be hard to find later on, how about one chapter for all that? You can also segregate types. Such as ninjutsu ideas, genjutsu ideas, fuinjutsu ideas and even kekkei genkais. I feel like that would be useful for you. One of the problems in creating new stuff to add to a fanfic is that there is a limit to how much one person can come up with. Eventually you’ll get burned out. These new ideas will also give you inspiration.
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Wow, I’m genuinely impressed. The writing quality, character development, and story progression are all top-notch. I’m not usually into Naruto fanfics, but this one really grabbed me. It’s a standout!
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La historia tiene sus buenos argumentos para que el protagonista sea OP, osea consiguió el talento de apolo en el Arte y demás, que eso lo debe de ayudar al momento de hacer ilusiones y el paisaje mental Después tiene la fuerza y demás, tiene un rompe limites cómo tercera recompensa, puedes imaginarte cómo si fuera Saitama, pero desde su nacimiento. Es Op desde el nacimiento, pero tiene sus buenos argumentos, fue un neurocirujano muy talentoso en su vida pasada y murio a los 80 años, y aparentemente no importandole muchas cosas, cosas que ahora valora por lo menos más que antes. Al contrario, me parece que un hombre de 80 años atrapado en un cuerpo del niño teniendo las características cómo describe que era, sería raro, y el autor se aseguró de qué este bien explicado y argumentado, de eso no hay duda. No es cómo otras historia donde el Prota es muy poderoso de la nada y porqué si y porqué Dios sabe porqué y para qué, y uno no quiere seguir leyendo porqué sabe cómo continuará.
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This has been nothing short of exemplary. The pacing is incredible, the dialog feels realistic, the characters are flushed out, the names are appropriate for the setting (No Bob Uchihas here), and there are no repetitions of ideals or beliefs (If there is, it’s so natural that you don't even notice it). Most importantly, there are no grammar issues; no misspellings, proper punctuation, and correct labeling (Chakra is not qi, ninjas are not mages, justsus are not spells, etc). This is everything a proper Naruto fanfic should be.
It's strange that there are so many positive comments. A very sad story. ︎︎ ︎︎ ︎︎ ︎︎ ︎︎ ︎︎ ︎︎ ︎︎ ︎︎ ︎︎ ︎︎ ︎︎ ︎︎ ︎︎ ︎︎ ︎︎ ︎︎ ︎︎ ︎︎ ︎︎ ︎︎ ︎︎ ︎︎ ︎︎ ︎︎ ︎︎ ︎︎ ︎︎ ︎︎ ︎︎ ︎︎ ︎︎ ︎︎ ︎︎ ︎︎ ︎︎ ︎︎ ︎︎ ︎︎ ︎︎ ︎︎ ︎︎ ︎︎ ︎︎ ︎︎ ︎︎ ︎︎ ︎︎ ︎︎ ︎︎ ︎︎ ︎︎ ︎︎ ︎︎
Awesome fic. Author's writing style feels like a breath of fresh air after reading the endless AI slob. A small suggestion to author : Maybe not use the same tone for all characters when doing POVs.
Great story, satisfied with the uptedate period as well as the longevity of the chapters
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The best fic I've read this month................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................
I've had this problem where I haven't been able to read anything on Webnovel due to the extremely low quality, after reading a bunch of stuff on kindle or heck even Royal Road you get used to a certain quality. That being said, I haven't had the urge to vomit reading this, thanks author!
Pretty good although the character interaction needs a little bit more work Overall the best fanfic I've read this week
A very good story, a chakra théorie interesting and complex but even good slice of life. For now the fight are simple and he only enter in the academy, so my review is only about 21 chapters
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So read the whole fic and I'm liking it a lot.there aren't any big problems with this fic like grammar or dialogue but the story doesn't really has anything new rather than just a reincarnated guy who is working to become op. Well not yet anyway the story only started so best of luck to the author and please finish the story don't just disappear one day
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I'm really looking forward to read more and author thank you creating such a good Mc, I always liked Smart and hard working Mc not the Cliché Mc who asked God for a 'System' to become strong. Without Hard work you won't able to become strong. ..... ..... ..... ..... ..... ..... .....
This fic is a fresh breath of air apart from the usual fics WBNVL has (Chinese trash or one with bad grammar or with a ridiculous and cliched storyline) read till Chapter 10... the fic is amazing .... it's something unique, setting apart from the usual Senju or Uzumaki or uchiha or clanless orphan trope This fic's really tryna cover something else, Yamanaka. the characterization and thought process till now is great... mc is a genius and isn't hiding I hope that author-san will keep on updating and not abandon this Would recommend it 100 percent
A new fic which is good after a LONG time. This platform is almost deprived of food fic nowadays. It's refreshing to see such good fic. the writing the build up the progress is smooth and phenomenal and there are wholesome moments too. A perfect blend. Love it ❤️❤️
One of the best Naruto fan-fics available, I hope the author continues to update and doesn't drop it!
Great Job!! I really like this Fic. Everything feels right, Grammar is nice, and is nothing like those Chinese System stories we see around. Yamanaka is not a clan we see people use that much, that is a plus for me. I hope it keeps getting better.
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This is so well written. I'm definitely going to be interested in this story as well as any others that this author writes.
This novel is worth your time and has zero Chinese cringe so far. I have no complaints and I am enjoying it very much. The characters feels real The setup and build up feels so natural. The mc is very likable and not a MORON he is self driven with higher goals that match his drive.
Love the story and hope you continue uploading it. I hope you get a patreon soon.
Мне очень нравится этот фанфик, [img=Loving it][img=Loving it][img=Loving it][img=Loving it][img=Loving it]жду проду как можно скорее, будут ли дополнительные главы сегодня
I read 2 chapters and i do not understand why this nonsense have 4 star rating (4 and sth) ............................................................
I honestly think this is one of the best Naruto stories I have read. It’s still very early on but the writing quality, world building and character interactions and development have been set to a very high standard. I also think it’s exploring the power system and world in a new and interesting way that I haven’t seen done this way before. I really can’t wait for more and look forward to seeing how the story further develops. Anyways it’s a fantastic read I highly recommend it and I can’t wait for more.
This has the makings of a masterpiece. Not in the greatest of quality. But in pioneering a new path. Like how mushoku tensei elevated isekai. There are new ideas here. And I can’t wait to see much much more. Lastly, for the author, can we have a chapter 0, where we can only give ideas of jutsus and discuss them? I have seen you asking for ideas in chapter comments, but instead of them being spread out in random chapter comments which would be hard to find later on, how about one chapter for all that? You can also segregate types. Such as ninjutsu ideas, genjutsu ideas, fuinjutsu ideas and even kekkei genkais. I feel like that would be useful for you. One of the problems in creating new stuff to add to a fanfic is that there is a limit to how much one person can come up with. Eventually you’ll get burned out. These new ideas will also give you inspiration.
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Wow, I’m genuinely impressed. The writing quality, character development, and story progression are all top-notch. I’m not usually into Naruto fanfics, but this one really grabbed me. It’s a standout!
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La historia tiene sus buenos argumentos para que el protagonista sea OP, osea consiguió el talento de apolo en el Arte y demás, que eso lo debe de ayudar al momento de hacer ilusiones y el paisaje mental Después tiene la fuerza y demás, tiene un rompe limites cómo tercera recompensa, puedes imaginarte cómo si fuera Saitama, pero desde su nacimiento. Es Op desde el nacimiento, pero tiene sus buenos argumentos, fue un neurocirujano muy talentoso en su vida pasada y murio a los 80 años, y aparentemente no importandole muchas cosas, cosas que ahora valora por lo menos más que antes. Al contrario, me parece que un hombre de 80 años atrapado en un cuerpo del niño teniendo las características cómo describe que era, sería raro, y el autor se aseguró de qué este bien explicado y argumentado, de eso no hay duda. No es cómo otras historia donde el Prota es muy poderoso de la nada y porqué si y porqué Dios sabe porqué y para qué, y uno no quiere seguir leyendo porqué sabe cómo continuará.
Spoiler de révélation This has been nothing short of exemplary. The pacing is incredible, the dialog feels realistic, the characters are flushed out, the names are appropriate for the setting (No Bob Uchihas here), and there are no repetitions of ideals or beliefs (If there is, it’s so natural that you don't even notice it). Most importantly, there are no grammar issues; no misspellings, proper punctuation, and correct labeling (Chakra is not qi, ninjas are not mages, justsus are not spells, etc). This is everything a proper Naruto fanfic should be.
It's strange that there are so many positive comments. A very sad story. ︎︎ ︎︎ ︎︎ ︎︎ ︎︎ ︎︎ ︎︎ ︎︎ ︎︎ ︎︎ ︎︎ ︎︎ ︎︎ ︎︎ ︎︎ ︎︎ ︎︎ ︎︎ ︎︎ ︎︎ ︎︎ ︎︎ ︎︎ ︎︎ ︎︎ ︎︎ ︎︎ ︎︎ ︎︎ ︎︎ ︎︎ ︎︎ ︎︎ ︎︎ ︎︎ ︎︎ ︎︎ ︎︎ ︎︎ ︎︎ ︎︎ ︎︎ ︎︎ ︎︎ ︎︎ ︎︎ ︎︎ ︎︎ ︎︎ ︎︎ ︎︎ ︎︎ ︎︎ ︎︎
Awesome fic. Author's writing style feels like a breath of fresh air after reading the endless AI slob. A small suggestion to author : Maybe not use the same tone for all characters when doing POVs.
Great story, satisfied with the uptedate period as well as the longevity of the chapters
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Spoiler de révélation The best fic I've read this month................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................
I've had this problem where I haven't been able to read anything on Webnovel due to the extremely low quality, after reading a bunch of stuff on kindle or heck even Royal Road you get used to a certain quality. That being said, I haven't had the urge to vomit reading this, thanks author!
Pretty good although the character interaction needs a little bit more work Overall the best fanfic I've read this week
A very good story, a chakra théorie interesting and complex but even good slice of life. For now the fight are simple and he only enter in the academy, so my review is only about 21 chapters
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So read the whole fic and I'm liking it a lot.there aren't any big problems with this fic like grammar or dialogue but the story doesn't really has anything new rather than just a reincarnated guy who is working to become op. Well not yet anyway the story only started so best of luck to the author and please finish the story don't just disappear one day
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