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After bra exists, she suddenly becomes the MC. she is somehow able to use ikari, super saiyan all at 3 years old. The quality in the writing itself is flawed, lacking so to say. everything is rushed. power up with no emotion (author tried, but failed), sacrifice of a dad and a true warrior is written without evoking a single emotion out of you. it is bland so to say. author didn't listen to readers comment and complaints. it's sad. a disappointment really. just like many dragon ball fanfics out there. he tried to be different, but failed to realize he's the same as everyone else.
You should read it yourself. To me it was tasteless. The mc is just as stupid as Goku "testing" his opponents. Also he's very passive in that new life, knowing all the tools needed to increase his strength he becomes obsessed with transformations instead (mostly because the author mistakingly takes transformations as power level). If basic combat power is only 50,000 under super Saiyan 2,5 million and ss2 is only 5 millions. But the author uses it as if just by transforming the mc can even defeat bills
Yeah this fell off hard when the author introduced Bra it literally sucked all my enjoyment from this story but don't listen to this bad review you should read the story for yourself before coming to a decision anyway best of luck to you author
Estoy dejando está reseña en caliente? Se, la cambiaría si fuera en frío ? No ⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⢀⠀⠐⠀⡁⠄⠂⠄⡀⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀ ⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⠄⠂⠀⠀⠐⠀⠀⠂⠸⢀⠒⢩⡐⡀⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀ ⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⠄⠐⠀⠁⡀⠠⠐⠂⡱⠻⣦⡀⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀ ⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⡀⣄⢢⡄⣐⢨⣰⣤⣴⣤⣅⣂⠁⠆⣹⢯⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀ ⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⢀⡳⡜⣧⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿⣧⡔⣩⡧⠄⠀⠀⠀⠀ ⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⢬⢳⣙⠶⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿⣝⡿⠣⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀ ⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⣿⢃⠎⠛⠼⢻⢿⣿⡿⠿⢿⣿⣿⣿⠻⢎⠁⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀ ⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⡀⡷⡉⠌⠁⠆⡁⢾⣿⣯⣩⡥⣹⣿⣿⣧⢨⠄⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀ ⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⡆⣷⣍⢮⡑⢦⡘⣽⣿⣿⣷⣿⣿⣿⣿⣷⣾⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀ ⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⣽⢳⡜⣦⡙⢦⡝⢾⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿⡏⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀ ⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⠃⢿⡜⣦⢙⢆⡰⣭⣿⣶⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿⠿⠃⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀ ⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⠸⡝⢦⡉⠖⠰⢛⠾⢿⡿⣿⣿⣿⡏⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀ ⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⡻⡱⢎⡲⣍⠯⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀ ⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⢰⠥⡙⢎⡵⣊⡿⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿⡀⠀⡀⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀ ⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⠳⣘⠤⣒⢡⠛⠽⣛⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿⣆⠄⠈⡐⠠⠀⠀⠀ ⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⠈⠑⠭⣲⢯⣷⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿⡿⠀⢂⠀⠡⠌⢠⠂
Great story over all! And I recommend reading it, but occasionally there are some glaring mistakes about the forms such as somebody unlocking SSJ2 then everyone being surprised by him showing SSJ2. Despite having seen it being used repeatedly by that character…
I was always disappointed by the low quality of dragon ball fan fic. However, this is the type of fan fic that I have read the most because I love the DB universe. For now this fic is by far the Dragon ball fic with the best debut I have ever seen the characters are really constructed they have relationships. Plus there's none of the misoginy and brainwashing of Chinese fan fic. It looks very good to me, I just hope that the author won't suddenly stop writing or make a harem at the mc, even if for the moment that doesn't seem to be the case. A big thank you to the author for finally making a respectable Dragon Ball fan fic. ps: If you have other dragon ball fan fics of this quality in mind, don't hesitate to recommend them to me
Entretenido[img=Loving it][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap]
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Is it a translation or an original story? It is interesting, maybe one or two grammatical errors but it is entertaining. Regarding the ssj4 remember that in GT Vegueta could transform without tail with the Bruits Beam Generator, it could be possible that on a full moon night if goten flies up to overcome the atmosphere could trigger its transformation to Ōzaru, taking into account what would receive the rays of the moon in greater intensity to be outside the atmosphere.
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help me escape from my life even if for a couple hours it means the world to me thank you for such a wonderful story hope to see more
After bra exists, she suddenly becomes the MC. she is somehow able to use ikari, super saiyan all at 3 years old. The quality in the writing itself is flawed, lacking so to say. everything is rushed. power up with no emotion (author tried, but failed), sacrifice of a dad and a true warrior is written without evoking a single emotion out of you. it is bland so to say. author didn't listen to readers comment and complaints. it's sad. a disappointment really. just like many dragon ball fanfics out there. he tried to be different, but failed to realize he's the same as everyone else.
You should read it yourself. To me it was tasteless. The mc is just as stupid as Goku "testing" his opponents. Also he's very passive in that new life, knowing all the tools needed to increase his strength he becomes obsessed with transformations instead (mostly because the author mistakingly takes transformations as power level). If basic combat power is only 50,000 under super Saiyan 2,5 million and ss2 is only 5 millions. But the author uses it as if just by transforming the mc can even defeat bills
Yeah this fell off hard when the author introduced Bra it literally sucked all my enjoyment from this story but don't listen to this bad review you should read the story for yourself before coming to a decision anyway best of luck to you author
Estoy dejando está reseña en caliente? Se, la cambiaría si fuera en frío ? No ⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⢀⠀⠐⠀⡁⠄⠂⠄⡀⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀ ⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⠄⠂⠀⠀⠐⠀⠀⠂⠸⢀⠒⢩⡐⡀⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀ ⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⠄⠐⠀⠁⡀⠠⠐⠂⡱⠻⣦⡀⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀ ⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⡀⣄⢢⡄⣐⢨⣰⣤⣴⣤⣅⣂⠁⠆⣹⢯⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀ ⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⢀⡳⡜⣧⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿⣧⡔⣩⡧⠄⠀⠀⠀⠀ ⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⢬⢳⣙⠶⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿⣝⡿⠣⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀ ⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⣿⢃⠎⠛⠼⢻⢿⣿⡿⠿⢿⣿⣿⣿⠻⢎⠁⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀ ⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⡀⡷⡉⠌⠁⠆⡁⢾⣿⣯⣩⡥⣹⣿⣿⣧⢨⠄⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀ ⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⡆⣷⣍⢮⡑⢦⡘⣽⣿⣿⣷⣿⣿⣿⣿⣷⣾⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀ ⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⣽⢳⡜⣦⡙⢦⡝⢾⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿⡏⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀ ⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⠃⢿⡜⣦⢙⢆⡰⣭⣿⣶⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿⠿⠃⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀ ⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⠸⡝⢦⡉⠖⠰⢛⠾⢿⡿⣿⣿⣿⡏⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀ ⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⡻⡱⢎⡲⣍⠯⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀ ⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⢰⠥⡙⢎⡵⣊⡿⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿⡀⠀⡀⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀ ⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⠳⣘⠤⣒⢡⠛⠽⣛⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿⣆⠄⠈⡐⠠⠀⠀⠀ ⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⠈⠑⠭⣲⢯⣷⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿⣿⡿⠀⢂⠀⠡⠌⢠⠂
Great story over all! And I recommend reading it, but occasionally there are some glaring mistakes about the forms such as somebody unlocking SSJ2 then everyone being surprised by him showing SSJ2. Despite having seen it being used repeatedly by that character…
I was always disappointed by the low quality of dragon ball fan fic. However, this is the type of fan fic that I have read the most because I love the DB universe. For now this fic is by far the Dragon ball fic with the best debut I have ever seen the characters are really constructed they have relationships. Plus there's none of the misoginy and brainwashing of Chinese fan fic. It looks very good to me, I just hope that the author won't suddenly stop writing or make a harem at the mc, even if for the moment that doesn't seem to be the case. A big thank you to the author for finally making a respectable Dragon Ball fan fic. ps: If you have other dragon ball fan fics of this quality in mind, don't hesitate to recommend them to me
Entretenido[img=Loving it][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap]
Good. ...................................................................... ......................................................................
Is it a translation or an original story? It is interesting, maybe one or two grammatical errors but it is entertaining. Regarding the ssj4 remember that in GT Vegueta could transform without tail with the Bruits Beam Generator, it could be possible that on a full moon night if goten flies up to overcome the atmosphere could trigger its transformation to Ōzaru, taking into account what would receive the rays of the moon in greater intensity to be outside the atmosphere.
👍...................................................................................................................................................................................
help me escape from my life even if for a couple hours it means the world to me thank you for such a wonderful story hope to see more