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The opening of chapters and starting f the novel is very good. It shows how the writers wants us to get caught in the adventure with the mc And we surely are having start. Plus the writing is good as it is developing in every chapter. Good book author... keep it up.
I love the pacing of the story so far. I'm normally not into system stories but I love this one especially the MC. I did notice there are a lot of big words though and I might have had to consult the dictionary a few times😅 But heh, I did learn some new words. Also the chapters are very lengthy which I like. Overall, it's a good story and I can't wait to read more. Good job!
Story is well written, and has quite a bit of future potential. Just remember this though, if you yourself, enjoy writing your stories, then that is the one thing that should matter the most more then anything else. Sometimes, it is not about any sort of money or payment, but should in fact, always be about enjoying sharing your work with your viewers and fans. And that, should always take priority, because if your fans and viewers enjoy reading your work, as well as potential future generations, then that is the one thing, that should matter more to you then anything else. For you see, people are more concerned in living in the here and now. While people me, we like to have a more, long game in mind. Now, don't take this as some sort of negative by any means, I am just saying, that if we want future generations to enjoy this world, then we have to be willing to protect what we love, in an effort to do our best to better our future.
I like this story, especially the change of atmosphere that we see from the beginning, it's promising.
Definitely a unique story, the plot is interesting and the way it’s described is pretty simple and easy to understand and doesn’t rushed up. Will keep reading.
This is a great book, revenge they say is a dish best served cold, but were I Kodesh, I wouldn't want to wait. Anyway, I would love to see how he would handle all.
I like the way things are described even if the writing style is a bit long but hey, when you get going you don't see the time go by, good work I'm waiting for the rest
I really like this story and it's pacing is really good and Kodesh is my favourite character
It is a nice read. the flow of story is very engaging, and the author is really pushing boundaries in the story 😂 I like the wordplay, too. but it needs further polishing for easier reading flow. please, keep on weaving this tale.
i love your beginning, a nice introduction. your book really piqued my interest in the very beginning but I'm gonna complain about long paragraphs. otherwise, your work shows the effort put into it.
I like how it starts, and the way it unfolds so far is really good. I hope it continues at this pace. I'm excited to see Kodach's growth.
Nice plot, though I advise reducing the redundancy of words in some places. Grammar should be taken care of. Otherwise, good style of writing and narration. Good job!
Really good writing technique. But it took me like 50 yrs to get passed chapter 1 because your huge words "cacophony" and "onerous" So my only problem is huge grammar. some of us aren't walking vocabularies. Good job 🍊
A great introduction to a compelling story. I know it will only get better from hereafter. I’m hooked
The opening of chapters and starting f the novel is very good. It shows how the writers wants us to get caught in the adventure with the mc And we surely are having start. Plus the writing is good as it is developing in every chapter. Good book author... keep it up.
I love the pacing of the story so far. I'm normally not into system stories but I love this one especially the MC. I did notice there are a lot of big words though and I might have had to consult the dictionary a few times😅 But heh, I did learn some new words. Also the chapters are very lengthy which I like. Overall, it's a good story and I can't wait to read more. Good job!
Story is well written, and has quite a bit of future potential. Just remember this though, if you yourself, enjoy writing your stories, then that is the one thing that should matter the most more then anything else. Sometimes, it is not about any sort of money or payment, but should in fact, always be about enjoying sharing your work with your viewers and fans. And that, should always take priority, because if your fans and viewers enjoy reading your work, as well as potential future generations, then that is the one thing, that should matter more to you then anything else. For you see, people are more concerned in living in the here and now. While people me, we like to have a more, long game in mind. Now, don't take this as some sort of negative by any means, I am just saying, that if we want future generations to enjoy this world, then we have to be willing to protect what we love, in an effort to do our best to better our future.
I like this story, especially the change of atmosphere that we see from the beginning, it's promising.
Definitely a unique story, the plot is interesting and the way it’s described is pretty simple and easy to understand and doesn’t rushed up. Will keep reading.
This is a great book, revenge they say is a dish best served cold, but were I Kodesh, I wouldn't want to wait. Anyway, I would love to see how he would handle all.
I like the way things are described even if the writing style is a bit long but hey, when you get going you don't see the time go by, good work I'm waiting for the rest
I really like this story and it's pacing is really good and Kodesh is my favourite character
It is a nice read. the flow of story is very engaging, and the author is really pushing boundaries in the story 😂 I like the wordplay, too. but it needs further polishing for easier reading flow. please, keep on weaving this tale.
i love your beginning, a nice introduction. your book really piqued my interest in the very beginning but I'm gonna complain about long paragraphs. otherwise, your work shows the effort put into it.
I like how it starts, and the way it unfolds so far is really good. I hope it continues at this pace. I'm excited to see Kodach's growth.
Nice plot, though I advise reducing the redundancy of words in some places. Grammar should be taken care of. Otherwise, good style of writing and narration. Good job!
Really good writing technique. But it took me like 50 yrs to get passed chapter 1 because your huge words "cacophony" and "onerous" So my only problem is huge grammar. some of us aren't walking vocabularies. Good job 🍊
A great introduction to a compelling story. I know it will only get better from hereafter. I’m hooked
Why not contracted yet? It's good bro. You dont wanna monetize it.