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the plot line of this fic is downright stupid, so this is an AU where Lyanna Stark is alive but to keep that a secret from Robert, they disguised her as a slave that Ned picked up and then they later sent her to Torhen's castle to "hide her" because it's safer for her to work with him outside of Winterfell, but for some brain dead reason, instead of just leaving Jon with her which would have been completely normal, because what bloody difference does it make if a slave had a son or not, instead the author tries to hold on to the original story so bloody hard that he forces the plotline of Jon being Ned's bastard even though it makes absolutely no bloody sense for them to do that, it literally serves no purpose for them to leave Jon with Ned. Not to mention the fact that our MC, who was a completely average person in his past life, knows everything about making a kingdom building, he knows everything from agriculture and politics to building blast furnaces and windmills.
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this is a kingdom building crack fic. everything is smooth as butter and MC knows everything. There's barely any realism put into this and everything is just, "because author wrote it so..."
Hello brother, your novel is going quite well, 12 days with 14 chapters, they are very good numbers, but 2 or 3 chapters per day would be great... hahaha I know... I ask a lot... but I fervently hope that your novel be very successful
Hope this is a kingdom building because the north really need one I always thought that to make the north independent again you have to grow your own food otherwise the tyrell gonna suck you dry you can't depend on another kingdom for food
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the plot line of this fic is downright stupid, so this is an AU where Lyanna Stark is alive but to keep that a secret from Robert, they disguised her as a slave that Ned picked up and then they later sent her to Torhen's castle to "hide her" because it's safer for her to work with him outside of Winterfell, but for some brain dead reason, instead of just leaving Jon with her which would have been completely normal, because what bloody difference does it make if a slave had a son or not, instead the author tries to hold on to the original story so bloody hard that he forces the plotline of Jon being Ned's bastard even though it makes absolutely no bloody sense for them to do that, it literally serves no purpose for them to leave Jon with Ned. Not to mention the fact that our MC, who was a completely average person in his past life, knows everything about making a kingdom building, he knows everything from agriculture and politics to building blast furnaces and windmills.
Spoiler de révélation this is a kingdom building crack fic. everything is smooth as butter and MC knows everything. There's barely any realism put into this and everything is just, "because author wrote it so..."
Hello brother, your novel is going quite well, 12 days with 14 chapters, they are very good numbers, but 2 or 3 chapters per day would be great... hahaha I know... I ask a lot... but I fervently hope that your novel be very successful
Hope this is a kingdom building because the north really need one I always thought that to make the north independent again you have to grow your own food otherwise the tyrell gonna suck you dry you can't depend on another kingdom for food
Wonderful. .............................................. ..... ........................................ ............................................... .................................................
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