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So far so good, the only tip for the author is to try to finish the chapters in a more natural way, as there were several released at once it didn't interfere with reading, but when the normal frequency starts it may leave something to be desired. Great work!
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The only thing i don't like bout it is that MC likes? to play more of a midfielder and he doesn't score goals when he clearly could do so, often passing the ball to his teammate but other than that the book has a lot of potential. pls make him score more goals author
Spoiler de révélation
Same boring plot that happens in every BL fanfic. Oh I’m gonna be in same wing as Isagi and make everyone stronger in the beginning so when the next selection comes everyone is stronger and prove my worth yadayada. Boring and overused. Come up with something original you bum.
Okay this is an actual review,, Kira/Mc is an knock off isagi with better dribbling and shooting.( Author doesn't describe his moves he'll say. "Kira shot was perfect and went corner" or dribbled smoothly, Theres no telling or unique to him. He helps everyone in blue lock/In His wing like isagi and raichi. Author its blue lock give him his own personality he always trying to improve them. *(And through out the whole story he had not improved or got better Nothing for the whole story*) AND Then on the field he trys writting him all hard and try to make him feel less friendly making orders but then off he always helping and has no backbone to say no... Im done reading this and hope this will tell what you wanted to know about the fic. Story development slow as he build raichi his own background and to make him improve better *His favorite character which is fine but don't be changing the story or fic because of that*. (To learn more on blue lock writting would say read God of Blue lock and other fics just to learn how they write it and take notes as your mc has nothing fancy or cool to even keep him in blue lock.)
So far so good, the only tip for the author is to try to finish the chapters in a more natural way, as there were several released at once it didn't interfere with reading, but when the normal frequency starts it may leave something to be desired. Great work!
Muy bueno en general. Me gustó Me gustó Me gustó Me gustó Me gustó Me gustó Me gustó Me gustó Me gustó Me gustó Me gustó Me gustó Me gustó Me gustó Me gustó Me gustó Me gustó Me gustó Me gustó Me gustó Me gustó Me gustó Me gustó Me gustóMe gustó Me gustó Me gustó Me gustó Me gustó Me gustó Me gustó Me gustó Me gustó Me gustó Me gustó Me gustó Me gustó Me gustó Me gustó Me gustó Me gustó Me gustó Me gustó Me gustó Me gustó Me gustó Me gustó Me gustó Me gustó Me gustó Me gustó Me gustó Me gustó Me gustó Me gustó Me gustó Me gustó Me gustó Me gustó Me gustó Me gustó Me gustó Me gustó Me gustó Me gustó Me gustó Me gustó Me gustó Me gustó Me gustó Me gustó Me gustó Me gustó Me gustó Me gustó Me gustó Me gustó Me gustó Me gustó Me gustó Me gustó Me gustó Me gustó Me gustó Me gustó Me gustó Me gustó Me gustó Me gustó Me gustó Me gustó Me gustó Me gustó Me gustó Me gustó Me gustó Me gustó Me gustó Me gustó Me gustó Me gustó Me gustó Me gustó Me gustó Me gustó Me gustó Me gustó Me gustó Me gustó Me gustó Me gustó Me gustó Me gustó Me gustó Me gustó Me gustó Me gustó Me gustó Me gustó Me gustó
The only thing i don't like bout it is that MC likes? to play more of a midfielder and he doesn't score goals when he clearly could do so, often passing the ball to his teammate but other than that the book has a lot of potential. pls make him score more goals author
Spoiler de révélation Same boring plot that happens in every BL fanfic. Oh I’m gonna be in same wing as Isagi and make everyone stronger in the beginning so when the next selection comes everyone is stronger and prove my worth yadayada. Boring and overused. Come up with something original you bum.
Okay this is an actual review,, Kira/Mc is an knock off isagi with better dribbling and shooting.( Author doesn't describe his moves he'll say. "Kira shot was perfect and went corner" or dribbled smoothly, Theres no telling or unique to him. He helps everyone in blue lock/In His wing like isagi and raichi. Author its blue lock give him his own personality he always trying to improve them. *(And through out the whole story he had not improved or got better Nothing for the whole story*) AND Then on the field he trys writting him all hard and try to make him feel less friendly making orders but then off he always helping and has no backbone to say no... Im done reading this and hope this will tell what you wanted to know about the fic. Story development slow as he build raichi his own background and to make him improve better *His favorite character which is fine but don't be changing the story or fic because of that*. (To learn more on blue lock writting would say read God of Blue lock and other fics just to learn how they write it and take notes as your mc has nothing fancy or cool to even keep him in blue lock.)