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Écrire un avisThe story is really good but you need to add punctuation and space. It's like a brick you have everything stuck together it's really hard to read you don't know when people talk, who talk... if you can fix that it would be really cool.
I think its a good story overall, but the first chapters are like a compact block without a lot of spacing, not many space with narative and other thing like when a character speak. but the more we moove themore it improve. But in general its a good story, i hope it will start again one day
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Great story just needs better spacing in the paragraphs and quotes to make It easier to read also commas when listing things but other than that it is great I am writing this as of chapter 7 being the most recent one that has come out