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The author clearly states the changes he made in his novel and admits that they did not exist in the original universe. this is very good. However, you can give it a chance, but it is entirely up to your taste. It's not for everyone, including me.
This is great so far. I do hope you take my suggestion on his horn appearance when they grow that is to say they look like a wolf's ears instead of a rabbit's.
If you're looking for an MC who has a minimum of intelligence, this isn't for you. the protagonist makes some rash and somewhat stupid decisions. however the story itself does not have a very specific focus, it is not clear where the author wants to go, and obviously as in all stories the plot armor is present in excessive quantities
dude, shadow clones are a technique of Konoha and the development of Tobirama, this is a forbidden jutsu, how can he use it, and especially since he is 3 years old, if he had done another training, the story would have gone in a different direction, but right now it reads as if it was written by a 10 year old boy who just watched Naruto and he too developed imaginationhe has so many abilities just his chakra and his body is already blowing the roof, even if he has not awakened all his abilities, at such an age and with such a volume of chakra and abilities, including the byakugan, you can come up with something more interesting than shadow clones, this is already such an outdated topic!)
The premise is pretty cool, dude is extremely overpowered right from the start but it’s alright since it got nerfed a tiny bit. Personally I just don’t like mc’s that have op powers but didn’t need to work for it at all. What I do like tho is that he is in kumo since that isn’t seen in a lot of fics The grammar and writing is average at best. I think the author forgot how to write the word ‘The’ in every sentence and the flow of the writing just doesn’t feel right. It’s like it was written in a rush and not looked over again after finishing. From the little bit I read the mc is an adult but behaves like a child.. may be because he is in a child’s body but whatever. This is basically just a generic wish fulfillment story
I'm just writing for fun. I might have many mistakes, either be like Lord 3rd and ignore them or be like the 7th and point it out... please don't choose to be lord 2nd.
The author clearly states the changes he made in his novel and admits that they did not exist in the original universe. this is very good. However, you can give it a chance, but it is entirely up to your taste. It's not for everyone, including me.
This is great so far. I do hope you take my suggestion on his horn appearance when they grow that is to say they look like a wolf's ears instead of a rabbit's.
If you're looking for an MC who has a minimum of intelligence, this isn't for you. the protagonist makes some rash and somewhat stupid decisions. however the story itself does not have a very specific focus, it is not clear where the author wants to go, and obviously as in all stories the plot armor is present in excessive quantities
dude, shadow clones are a technique of Konoha and the development of Tobirama, this is a forbidden jutsu, how can he use it, and especially since he is 3 years old, if he had done another training, the story would have gone in a different direction, but right now it reads as if it was written by a 10 year old boy who just watched Naruto and he too developed imaginationhe has so many abilities just his chakra and his body is already blowing the roof, even if he has not awakened all his abilities, at such an age and with such a volume of chakra and abilities, including the byakugan, you can come up with something more interesting than shadow clones, this is already such an outdated topic!)
The premise is pretty cool, dude is extremely overpowered right from the start but it’s alright since it got nerfed a tiny bit. Personally I just don’t like mc’s that have op powers but didn’t need to work for it at all. What I do like tho is that he is in kumo since that isn’t seen in a lot of fics The grammar and writing is average at best. I think the author forgot how to write the word ‘The’ in every sentence and the flow of the writing just doesn’t feel right. It’s like it was written in a rush and not looked over again after finishing. From the little bit I read the mc is an adult but behaves like a child.. may be because he is in a child’s body but whatever. This is basically just a generic wish fulfillment story
I'm just writing for fun. I might have many mistakes, either be like Lord 3rd and ignore them or be like the 7th and point it out... please don't choose to be lord 2nd.