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I saw other authors doing it, so I shall shamelessly as well. Why not? I'll review the book once more, giving its pros and cons when it gets to chapter 100. For now, ask any questions you have, and I'll do my best to answer them (ofc no spoilers). Those asking for the discord, the link will be below the synopsis when it's up. Thank you to all who have taken their time to read the little world I made even tho it's imperfect in its own ways :)
Review Time [Note:something happened to my previous review, so here we go again] Story: 99/10 Grammar: 10/10 Pacing: 8.9/10 Update stability: 10/10 It will reach the peak. It's a magnificent story. Well written, very good grammar and the pacing is good. I'm excited. I'm liking Noah and Maya's character so far. Noah is like ayanokoji, has everything planned and Maya is a sweet assassin. It's going so far good. Since it's no harem, I want to see how the romance will turn out. So give it a try. Looking forward to seeing more chapters.
What got me interested is Noah's design; he reminds me so much of a character from a novel I read long ago, Noah Wynknight (ifykyk). Overall, I'm really satisfied with how the story is progressing.
This novel is fantastic! The author does a great job with character development, especially with the MC. The storyline is thrilling, and each chapter leaves me wanting more.
A masterpiece in the making! The MC is brilliantly crafted, and the story flows well.
Incredible storytelling! The MC has a depth I rarely see, and the writing style is refreshing. Story development is strong
One of the best novels I’ve read recently. The MC is incredibly well-written, and I enjoy the writing style. The story unfolds at a great pace. Wish we had more updates—I'm totally invested!
This novel is simply amazing! The writing pulls you in from the start, and the MC is crafted with such depth. The pacing is just right, giving us time to understand the main character while hinting at a bigger world. I’m curious to see how the story will develop as we go deeper. Can’t wait for the next chapter—this is a hidden gem
"A captivating story! The MC is complex and relatable, and the writing is seamless. The plot moves at a good pace, and I'm excited to learn more about the other characters. Need more chapters soon
Highly recommend this novel! The MC has a depth I didn’t expect, and the world-building is getting interesting. Only wish the updates were more frequent, as the story has a ton of potential.
Fantastic novel! The writing is well-crafted, and the characters are unique. I’ve mostly focused on the MC so far, and they're incredibly intriguing. The story development keeps me on edge. Just waiting for more chapters
I'm hooked! The writing style is smooth and engaging. The MC is fascinating, Plot progression is solid, and I can’t wait to see where this goes. Need more updates ASAP
This novel is a must-read! The storytelling is on point, and the pacing is perfect. The MC is well-written, but I wish we had more screen time for the side characters. Story development keeps getting better, and each chapter leaves me wanting more!
Questo romanzo è fantastico; dovresti leggerlo! La scrittura è impeccabile. Il personaggio principale è ottimo, anche se finora ho visto solo il MC e non posso parlare degli altri personaggi. Ma il MC è ben sviluppato. Lo sviluppo della storia sta migliorando, e presto vedremo le abilità del MC. La frequenza di aggiornamento è buona, ma abbiamo bisogno di più capitoli. Per quanto riguarda la costruzione del mondo, non posso dire molto ancora.
Spoiler de révélation
Dieser Roman ist großartig; du solltest ihn lesen! Der Schreibstil ist makellos. Der Hauptcharakter ist großartig, obwohl ich bisher nur den MC gesehen habe und nichts über die anderen Charaktere sagen kann. Aber der MC ist gut entwickelt. Die Geschichte entwickelt sich wirklich gut, und wir werden bald die Fähigkeiten des MC sehen.
Ce roman est génial ; vous devriez le lire ! L'écriture est impeccable. Le personnage principal est excellent, bien que je n'aie vu que le MC jusqu'à présent, donc je ne peux pas parler des autres personnages. Mais le MC est bien développé. Le développement de l'histoire s'améliore vraiment, et nous allons bientôt découvrir les capacités du MC. La fréquence de mise à jour est bonne, mais nous avons besoin de plus de chapitres. Quant à l'univers, je ne peux pas encore en dire beaucoup.
¡Esta novela es genial; deberías leerla! La escritura es impecable. El protagonista es genial, aunque solo he visto al personaje principal hasta ahora y no puedo hablar por los otros personajes. Pero el MC está bien desarrollado. El desarrollo de la historia está mejorando, y estamos a punto de ver las habilidades del MC. La frecuencia de actualización es buena, pero necesitamos más capítulos. En cuanto a la construcción del mundo, aún no puedo decir mucho.
Another MC who is like I wont interfere with the story plot since it will change the future and what I know. Its like a stupid loop change the plot, now I dont know future, and dont change the plot then I know the future whats the point. You can deal with changes as they come and get stronger based on what you can do smh. At the same time he has already changed the plot multiple times, and still saying the same BS.
Read 96/114 as of this review. The story is not bad. The author has some surprising interesting developments in the story which offer great twists, but the execution often falls short. This is because it often feels like it's shoehorned in, not planned,so it it can feel not developed enough or out of place. The story also tends to have several chapters where I've read that feel like it didn't offer any real purpose or just word padding. So it's annoying when you're waiting for the plot to kick in, it's fine if it's satisfactory, but it wasn't for me unfortunately. The character I like the most is suprisingly Xavier and Rylan. This may be because they doesn't get as much screen time as they should, but when they appear, it is often meaningful and I find myself attached to them. As for the romance... not going to lie. It sucks. Maya gives off the vibes of the childhood friend role which is seen in anime. While she isn't useless, most of the time she's quite bland. She is kind, supports the main character wholeheartedly, working to support him behind the scenes ,and while she does have some backstory it's not used to the full potential. To me, she's boring. It's completely fine to be bland or bland, but it needs to stand out . Ariana- She's a little better than Maya. Her cuteness is often portrayed better. But other than that, she doesn't offer much, just serving as the other point of the love triangle. Though i do have some interest in her reactions in the latest chapters and we will see how her jealousy corrupts her. That is something to look forward to and would make her interesting. The character I used to like most was Amy. But the author is very inconsistent with her, much like when the MC interacts with the heroines. She is an arrogant bit**, at her core and after being saved by the Mc, there were scenes where she seemed to be having a crush on him. But that had completely disappeared as if it didn't exist, much to my great disappointment. Instead, she later turns weirdly super serious when the concept of the Vanguards are introduced. It's fine to show a hidden super serious side to her, but it should still flaunt her usual demeanour, but i's mellowed out. Instead, when she approached the mc, it's very formal and very unlike her in any way. Then she goes back to being a bit** and ofc the love interest in mc is forgotten and instead she wants to kill him. The problem isn't the idea of wanting to kill him, but rather the fact that development is inconsistent and discarded. An approach that could've been taken was she's torn between her hidden feelings of love with humiliation + her usual persona. That's what I would've liked to see and would make Amy more interesting. Overall, the story isn't a bad read. it really does have some nice twists, i just wished the author developed them and kept foreshadowing, instead of them just popping in, making it feel shoehorned. I will still read the story since the latest chapters seems to finally have plot kick in and I'm interested in seeing the characters, seeing that they are all corrupting at the same time. Though since I come for romance or best girl, the lack of, or rather done mundanely here is really compelling me to drop it. Still waiting for the Amy art and hoping she becomes a heroine. Don't be discouraged by my critique author! Please keep up the work! I did pay to read up to chapter 96, so that says something. Perhaps giving the mc some friends would be great. I think it would serve as great conflict if you did it with Xavier or Rylan. Also Amy as a heroine because the relationship between them can be very interesting, if done right.
I really love the plot so far and I don't really have anything to nag about but... I just hate that everything these days costs points and I can only buy 2 fast passes a week meaning I can only read 2 chapters a week and if I want to read another story even less. Im just wondering how can others read it? Can please someone tell.
The 10th review for this great work. You can't prepare for what you can't see.
The story is magnificent, when I saw one of the main characters die I cried, but not tears of sadness but tears of Joy. This was wonderfully planned and written. But be warned that if I see even one of the main characters still alive at the end I will be forced to use my domain expansion: 1 star review spam. That is all...
This novel sucks. Not funny. (Plz transport me inside of novel author kun. I will give u anything )
I can really relate to Kim/Noah. And can we all appreciate how much work was put into the characters? They really did a good job in making hate Amy. Can't wait for the other chapters
I saw other authors doing it, so I shall shamelessly as well. Why not? I'll review the book once more, giving its pros and cons when it gets to chapter 100. For now, ask any questions you have, and I'll do my best to answer them (ofc no spoilers). Those asking for the discord, the link will be below the synopsis when it's up. Thank you to all who have taken their time to read the little world I made even tho it's imperfect in its own ways :)
Review Time [Note:something happened to my previous review, so here we go again] Story: 99/10 Grammar: 10/10 Pacing: 8.9/10 Update stability: 10/10 It will reach the peak. It's a magnificent story. Well written, very good grammar and the pacing is good. I'm excited. I'm liking Noah and Maya's character so far. Noah is like ayanokoji, has everything planned and Maya is a sweet assassin. It's going so far good. Since it's no harem, I want to see how the romance will turn out. So give it a try. Looking forward to seeing more chapters.
What got me interested is Noah's design; he reminds me so much of a character from a novel I read long ago, Noah Wynknight (ifykyk). Overall, I'm really satisfied with how the story is progressing.
This novel is fantastic! The author does a great job with character development, especially with the MC. The storyline is thrilling, and each chapter leaves me wanting more.
A masterpiece in the making! The MC is brilliantly crafted, and the story flows well.
Incredible storytelling! The MC has a depth I rarely see, and the writing style is refreshing. Story development is strong
One of the best novels I’ve read recently. The MC is incredibly well-written, and I enjoy the writing style. The story unfolds at a great pace. Wish we had more updates—I'm totally invested!
This novel is simply amazing! The writing pulls you in from the start, and the MC is crafted with such depth. The pacing is just right, giving us time to understand the main character while hinting at a bigger world. I’m curious to see how the story will develop as we go deeper. Can’t wait for the next chapter—this is a hidden gem
"A captivating story! The MC is complex and relatable, and the writing is seamless. The plot moves at a good pace, and I'm excited to learn more about the other characters. Need more chapters soon
Highly recommend this novel! The MC has a depth I didn’t expect, and the world-building is getting interesting. Only wish the updates were more frequent, as the story has a ton of potential.
Fantastic novel! The writing is well-crafted, and the characters are unique. I’ve mostly focused on the MC so far, and they're incredibly intriguing. The story development keeps me on edge. Just waiting for more chapters
I'm hooked! The writing style is smooth and engaging. The MC is fascinating, Plot progression is solid, and I can’t wait to see where this goes. Need more updates ASAP
This novel is a must-read! The storytelling is on point, and the pacing is perfect. The MC is well-written, but I wish we had more screen time for the side characters. Story development keeps getting better, and each chapter leaves me wanting more!
Questo romanzo è fantastico; dovresti leggerlo! La scrittura è impeccabile. Il personaggio principale è ottimo, anche se finora ho visto solo il MC e non posso parlare degli altri personaggi. Ma il MC è ben sviluppato. Lo sviluppo della storia sta migliorando, e presto vedremo le abilità del MC. La frequenza di aggiornamento è buona, ma abbiamo bisogno di più capitoli. Per quanto riguarda la costruzione del mondo, non posso dire molto ancora.
Spoiler de révélation Dieser Roman ist großartig; du solltest ihn lesen! Der Schreibstil ist makellos. Der Hauptcharakter ist großartig, obwohl ich bisher nur den MC gesehen habe und nichts über die anderen Charaktere sagen kann. Aber der MC ist gut entwickelt. Die Geschichte entwickelt sich wirklich gut, und wir werden bald die Fähigkeiten des MC sehen.
Ce roman est génial ; vous devriez le lire ! L'écriture est impeccable. Le personnage principal est excellent, bien que je n'aie vu que le MC jusqu'à présent, donc je ne peux pas parler des autres personnages. Mais le MC est bien développé. Le développement de l'histoire s'améliore vraiment, et nous allons bientôt découvrir les capacités du MC. La fréquence de mise à jour est bonne, mais nous avons besoin de plus de chapitres. Quant à l'univers, je ne peux pas encore en dire beaucoup.
¡Esta novela es genial; deberías leerla! La escritura es impecable. El protagonista es genial, aunque solo he visto al personaje principal hasta ahora y no puedo hablar por los otros personajes. Pero el MC está bien desarrollado. El desarrollo de la historia está mejorando, y estamos a punto de ver las habilidades del MC. La frecuencia de actualización es buena, pero necesitamos más capítulos. En cuanto a la construcción del mundo, aún no puedo decir mucho.
Another MC who is like I wont interfere with the story plot since it will change the future and what I know. Its like a stupid loop change the plot, now I dont know future, and dont change the plot then I know the future whats the point. You can deal with changes as they come and get stronger based on what you can do smh. At the same time he has already changed the plot multiple times, and still saying the same BS.
Read 96/114 as of this review. The story is not bad. The author has some surprising interesting developments in the story which offer great twists, but the execution often falls short. This is because it often feels like it's shoehorned in, not planned,so it it can feel not developed enough or out of place. The story also tends to have several chapters where I've read that feel like it didn't offer any real purpose or just word padding. So it's annoying when you're waiting for the plot to kick in, it's fine if it's satisfactory, but it wasn't for me unfortunately. The character I like the most is suprisingly Xavier and Rylan. This may be because they doesn't get as much screen time as they should, but when they appear, it is often meaningful and I find myself attached to them. As for the romance... not going to lie. It sucks. Maya gives off the vibes of the childhood friend role which is seen in anime. While she isn't useless, most of the time she's quite bland. She is kind, supports the main character wholeheartedly, working to support him behind the scenes ,and while she does have some backstory it's not used to the full potential. To me, she's boring. It's completely fine to be bland or bland, but it needs to stand out . Ariana- She's a little better than Maya. Her cuteness is often portrayed better. But other than that, she doesn't offer much, just serving as the other point of the love triangle. Though i do have some interest in her reactions in the latest chapters and we will see how her jealousy corrupts her. That is something to look forward to and would make her interesting. The character I used to like most was Amy. But the author is very inconsistent with her, much like when the MC interacts with the heroines. She is an arrogant bit**, at her core and after being saved by the Mc, there were scenes where she seemed to be having a crush on him. But that had completely disappeared as if it didn't exist, much to my great disappointment. Instead, she later turns weirdly super serious when the concept of the Vanguards are introduced. It's fine to show a hidden super serious side to her, but it should still flaunt her usual demeanour, but i's mellowed out. Instead, when she approached the mc, it's very formal and very unlike her in any way. Then she goes back to being a bit** and ofc the love interest in mc is forgotten and instead she wants to kill him. The problem isn't the idea of wanting to kill him, but rather the fact that development is inconsistent and discarded. An approach that could've been taken was she's torn between her hidden feelings of love with humiliation + her usual persona. That's what I would've liked to see and would make Amy more interesting. Overall, the story isn't a bad read. it really does have some nice twists, i just wished the author developed them and kept foreshadowing, instead of them just popping in, making it feel shoehorned. I will still read the story since the latest chapters seems to finally have plot kick in and I'm interested in seeing the characters, seeing that they are all corrupting at the same time. Though since I come for romance or best girl, the lack of, or rather done mundanely here is really compelling me to drop it. Still waiting for the Amy art and hoping she becomes a heroine. Don't be discouraged by my critique author! Please keep up the work! I did pay to read up to chapter 96, so that says something. Perhaps giving the mc some friends would be great. I think it would serve as great conflict if you did it with Xavier or Rylan. Also Amy as a heroine because the relationship between them can be very interesting, if done right.
I really love the plot so far and I don't really have anything to nag about but... I just hate that everything these days costs points and I can only buy 2 fast passes a week meaning I can only read 2 chapters a week and if I want to read another story even less. Im just wondering how can others read it? Can please someone tell.
The 10th review for this great work. You can't prepare for what you can't see.
The story is magnificent, when I saw one of the main characters die I cried, but not tears of sadness but tears of Joy. This was wonderfully planned and written. But be warned that if I see even one of the main characters still alive at the end I will be forced to use my domain expansion: 1 star review spam. That is all...
This novel sucks. Not funny. (Plz transport me inside of novel author kun. I will give u anything )
I can really relate to Kim/Noah. And can we all appreciate how much work was put into the characters? They really did a good job in making hate Amy. Can't wait for the other chapters