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Te la estás rifando amigo, esto es oro en comparación con todo lo demás. La historia puede llegar a ser parecida a muchas otras que he llegado a leer y la única cosa que la diferencia de las demás, Es que tú si sabes escribir. Tienes algo bueno aquí hermano no pares que ya soy adicto
well written. just kinda boring. Its not very fantasy more gritty realism. He isnt very powerful. Even Batman the weakest of the league could demolish him. I get a depressive vibe from this story that along with the gritty realism drops my attention span quickly.
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I am enjoying the story. I appreciate its slow pace and attention to detail in world-building. However, I do have a concern about the repetitive content. The scenes where the characters steal from gangs felt somewhat repetitive, as they seemed quite similar. That aside, I’m really liking the story. I remember you incorporated an idea about powers from a previous comment, so I have some suggestions inspired by famous vampire lore (excluding the typical Dracula abilities like shapeshifting, hypnotization, etc.). 1. **Memory/Skill Devour**: The ability to consume memories, potentially learning skills from them. 2. **Magical Aptitude**: Vampires generally possess stronger magical abilities than humans. 3. **Blood Bending**: Similar to the concept in *Avatar: The Last Airbender*, the control of blood. 4. **Biological Manipulation**: Typically tied to the vampire's own blood, this power allows them to affect other biological life forms connected to it. 5. **Empathic Powers**: The ability to sense and manipulate others' emotions. 6. **Blood Adaptation**: Some vampires can acquire weaker versions of their victim's powers, with these abilities growing stronger the more blood they consume. 7. **Phasing Ability**: The power to shift density and pass through solid objects, like walls. 8. **Mist Form**: The ability to transform into mist. 9. **Life Sensing**: The ability to sense (or smell) any nearby living creatures. 10. **Soul Devour**: Similarly to Ragman from DC, some Vampire can absorbs the souls of victims they fully drain obtaining their whole essence. Meaning eating 10 people while give you the speed, strength, intelligence and wisdom of 10 men. So the power of a normal human x 10. Combine with memory devour you can have a type of Hive mind situation. 11. **Magical Claws/Teeth**: Their claws and teeth have the ability to magically pierce any type of flesh, whether human or superhuman. Feel free to mix and match any of these ideas!
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It is written well. The hero is a kind of positive vampire. He drinks without killing, but rather debauching, corrupting. But the dynamics of the story are rather slow, dry and boring. The hero's story lacks challenges, difficulties, surprises, external events, interpersonal relationships (what is are one-sided). There are no competitors, worthy opponents, insurmountable threats either. Of course, it may still appear, but the given pace/motive does not encourage it. The characters that are there are not bad, but they are terribly secondary (they are just a background for the hero). The entire known world is one part of Gotham, abandoned by everyone and were is nothing happens.
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Awesome Story! Do tone down the whole bad language thing though, it's not so nice, but I think the author learned to mind his language....usually, hahaha
One of the best vampire stories on webnovel, if not the best. Did you read DC: Vampire? It was dropped some time ago but the concept is similar (superfically)
hey man, I've literally read merely the first chapter and the quality is sooo good. Love it. hopefully will be consistent and hope to see you book in the top 20 consistently.
Great writing, good character and world development. Needs to improve update stability so as not to leave readers restless about when the next chapter will come out, but other than that it's an excellent novel. It would be cool if it could have POV changes for other characters. Sorry my english #Brazil.
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Lo único que no me agrado fue el MC y su brújula moral, pero por lo demás está perfecto............................................................................................................
Authors name is hamtaro, the one true goat. Having hamtaro as a name is the greatest thing possible, something better than that is impossible. Well, I guess the story is good too, but who cares about that when the authors name is hamtaro
great story looking forward to seeing if he turns one of his blood Dolls to increase his power
The grammar is great the plot is interesting and the dialogue between characters are crisp all in all the story is good. I need more chapters.
Chapters are decently long (at least the first 3 are), so don't get discouraged because of the chapter numbers. It's worth a try.
hope this does not get dropped. really like this one and eager to see where it goes from here.
This is the best interpretation of a vampire I have seen in fanfiction. He actually needs to drink blood and isn't extremely angsty or overly evil. The MC is fun and doesn't seem to have a God complex that 90% of vampire SIs seem to develop. I love it. I hope you keep posting. It doesn't matter how long it takes between chapters as long as you finish this. Also, the world-building is extremely interesting. I enjoyed reading about the more rotten side of Gotham, as well as how the city functions in general. Thanks 😊
Best vampire fanfic I've seen so far. :) ..,.,.,.,.,,.,.,.,.,.,..,,.,.,.,.,.,.,.,.,.,.,..,.,.,.,.,.,.,.,.,.,..,.,.,.,.,.,.,.,.,.,.,.,.,.,.,.,.,.,.,.,..,..,.,.,.,.,.,.,.
Great story so far. I have enjoyed the character interactions. The author is very interactive in the progress of the story. I'm looking forward to more.
have not read a chapter yet, very interesting, just filling the words so i can post s s s s s s s s s s s s s s s s s s s s s s s s s s s s s s s
Great job!!! The author has created an exciting and original plot that immerses the reader in the world. The main character, a vampire, turned out to be very charismatic and interesting. He is not just a bloodthirsty monster, but a character with his own views, I have not met anything like this before. I recommend it to all fans of comics and fantasy!
It's rare to find a story that isn't about reincarnation around here, I really like it when the MC is original from their world The FanFic idea is very good and so far well worked on, I hope it continues to be good and gets more recognition.
I'm the author! Ask me questions! Give me suggestions! I'll answer them all, pinky promise. I can only promise you one thing, I'll never give you up, I'll never let you down, and yes I did Rick Roll you.
Te la estás rifando amigo, esto es oro en comparación con todo lo demás. La historia puede llegar a ser parecida a muchas otras que he llegado a leer y la única cosa que la diferencia de las demás, Es que tú si sabes escribir. Tienes algo bueno aquí hermano no pares que ya soy adicto
well written. just kinda boring. Its not very fantasy more gritty realism. He isnt very powerful. Even Batman the weakest of the league could demolish him. I get a depressive vibe from this story that along with the gritty realism drops my attention span quickly.
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I am enjoying the story. I appreciate its slow pace and attention to detail in world-building. However, I do have a concern about the repetitive content. The scenes where the characters steal from gangs felt somewhat repetitive, as they seemed quite similar. That aside, I’m really liking the story. I remember you incorporated an idea about powers from a previous comment, so I have some suggestions inspired by famous vampire lore (excluding the typical Dracula abilities like shapeshifting, hypnotization, etc.). 1. **Memory/Skill Devour**: The ability to consume memories, potentially learning skills from them. 2. **Magical Aptitude**: Vampires generally possess stronger magical abilities than humans. 3. **Blood Bending**: Similar to the concept in *Avatar: The Last Airbender*, the control of blood. 4. **Biological Manipulation**: Typically tied to the vampire's own blood, this power allows them to affect other biological life forms connected to it. 5. **Empathic Powers**: The ability to sense and manipulate others' emotions. 6. **Blood Adaptation**: Some vampires can acquire weaker versions of their victim's powers, with these abilities growing stronger the more blood they consume. 7. **Phasing Ability**: The power to shift density and pass through solid objects, like walls. 8. **Mist Form**: The ability to transform into mist. 9. **Life Sensing**: The ability to sense (or smell) any nearby living creatures. 10. **Soul Devour**: Similarly to Ragman from DC, some Vampire can absorbs the souls of victims they fully drain obtaining their whole essence. Meaning eating 10 people while give you the speed, strength, intelligence and wisdom of 10 men. So the power of a normal human x 10. Combine with memory devour you can have a type of Hive mind situation. 11. **Magical Claws/Teeth**: Their claws and teeth have the ability to magically pierce any type of flesh, whether human or superhuman. Feel free to mix and match any of these ideas!
I think plot is very good.I like it .You should move on youre amazing.ehsnnsnensnsnsnsnsnsnjsjdnsnsnsnsnsnsnsnsnsnsnjsnsnsnsnsnsnsnsnsnsnsnsnsnsnsnsnsnsnsnsnsnsnnsjsjsnsnsnsns
It is written well. The hero is a kind of positive vampire. He drinks without killing, but rather debauching, corrupting. But the dynamics of the story are rather slow, dry and boring. The hero's story lacks challenges, difficulties, surprises, external events, interpersonal relationships (what is are one-sided). There are no competitors, worthy opponents, insurmountable threats either. Of course, it may still appear, but the given pace/motive does not encourage it. The characters that are there are not bad, but they are terribly secondary (they are just a background for the hero). The entire known world is one part of Gotham, abandoned by everyone and were is nothing happens.
Spoiler de révélation Awesome Story! Do tone down the whole bad language thing though, it's not so nice, but I think the author learned to mind his language....usually, hahaha
One of the best vampire stories on webnovel, if not the best. Did you read DC: Vampire? It was dropped some time ago but the concept is similar (superfically)
hey man, I've literally read merely the first chapter and the quality is sooo good. Love it. hopefully will be consistent and hope to see you book in the top 20 consistently.
Great writing, good character and world development. Needs to improve update stability so as not to leave readers restless about when the next chapter will come out, but other than that it's an excellent novel. It would be cool if it could have POV changes for other characters. Sorry my english #Brazil.
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Lo único que no me agrado fue el MC y su brújula moral, pero por lo demás está perfecto............................................................................................................
Authors name is hamtaro, the one true goat. Having hamtaro as a name is the greatest thing possible, something better than that is impossible. Well, I guess the story is good too, but who cares about that when the authors name is hamtaro
great story looking forward to seeing if he turns one of his blood Dolls to increase his power
The grammar is great the plot is interesting and the dialogue between characters are crisp all in all the story is good. I need more chapters.
Chapters are decently long (at least the first 3 are), so don't get discouraged because of the chapter numbers. It's worth a try.
hope this does not get dropped. really like this one and eager to see where it goes from here.
This is the best interpretation of a vampire I have seen in fanfiction. He actually needs to drink blood and isn't extremely angsty or overly evil. The MC is fun and doesn't seem to have a God complex that 90% of vampire SIs seem to develop. I love it. I hope you keep posting. It doesn't matter how long it takes between chapters as long as you finish this. Also, the world-building is extremely interesting. I enjoyed reading about the more rotten side of Gotham, as well as how the city functions in general. Thanks 😊
Best vampire fanfic I've seen so far. :) ..,.,.,.,.,,.,.,.,.,.,..,,.,.,.,.,.,.,.,.,.,.,..,.,.,.,.,.,.,.,.,.,..,.,.,.,.,.,.,.,.,.,.,.,.,.,.,.,.,.,.,.,..,..,.,.,.,.,.,.,.
Great story so far. I have enjoyed the character interactions. The author is very interactive in the progress of the story. I'm looking forward to more.
have not read a chapter yet, very interesting, just filling the words so i can post s s s s s s s s s s s s s s s s s s s s s s s s s s s s s s s
Great job!!! The author has created an exciting and original plot that immerses the reader in the world. The main character, a vampire, turned out to be very charismatic and interesting. He is not just a bloodthirsty monster, but a character with his own views, I have not met anything like this before. I recommend it to all fans of comics and fantasy!
It's rare to find a story that isn't about reincarnation around here, I really like it when the MC is original from their world The FanFic idea is very good and so far well worked on, I hope it continues to be good and gets more recognition.
I'm the author! Ask me questions! Give me suggestions! I'll answer them all, pinky promise. I can only promise you one thing, I'll never give you up, I'll never let you down, and yes I did Rick Roll you.