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Character had potential to be top tier one piece fanfic OC but the author wants to make this story a fanservice pedo loli Pokémon catch ‘em all fanfic harem. The MC talks about trust and no betrayal yet manipulating little girls into joining his harem and grooming them. These authors needs a background check because this some criminal activity being allowed on the platform.
es entretenida, nada muy especial, decae en algunos capítulos a la hora de formar relaciones, el mc es un poco irritante pero me gustó su personalidad
Me gustó la historia sinceramente es entretenido de leer pero.................Este MC está demasiado obsesionado con las sirvientas y sinceramente el último capítulo me decepcionó mucho...... Quiero decir leí esperando como haría Kahn para conseguir que Kuina se uniera a el y en la primera vez que se ven le dice "Oye niña quieres ser mí sirvienta? "...... realmente me pareció lo más patético que leí en mí vida.
I've only read the story up to chapter 12 and I'm really disappointed. Up to this point we only tell what happens in the story and almost never show anything of the story. This makes the story very tiring for me because even entertainment is simply left out with the words “they are talking”. Nico Robin is raised by the MC to be a slave who cleans and fights for him. Your love for archiology is completely removed. He frees Boa Hancock and her sisters in order to enslave them himself. I find this more than a little disturbing and should actually bring out negative emotions in Hancock and her sisters. Far too much time is spent on unimportant information and instead content is simply left out.
Love the book. Hey there is a writer named “bamberg” who is copying your story. Did you allowed him to?
Holy ----------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------
I love this fanfic!! I read this and the one on the MTL and it's not finish I got stop when he successfully copy the Nika fruit. Can anyone recommend me fanfic story like this one?? I would love if it has harem!
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Pokemon harem BS, there's no substance in the story and a whole bunch of creeps in the comments.
The story is years before canon so you can expect a lot of changes from the original, the love interests are loli versions of the most popular girls, the translation is pretty poor so good luck with that, the main character is your typical cocky Chinese guy, there's no system so points for that. The story isn't that great but it's good for passing the time.
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Add to the Harem: Nico Robin, Boa Hancock, Nami, Nojiko, Viola, Rebecca, Shirahoshi, Shyarly, Baby-5, Monet, Yamato, Uta, Vivi, Baccarat, Carina, Smoothie, Hiyori, Reiju, Carrot, Sadi....... HAREM HAREM HAREM HAREM HAREM HAREM HAREM HAREM HAREM HAREM HAREM HAREM HAREM HAREM HAREM HAREM HAREM HAREM HAREM HAREM HAREM HAREM HAREM HAREM HAREM HAREM HAREM HAREM HAREM HAREM HAREM HAREM HAREM HAREM HAREM HAREM HAREM HAREM HAREM HAREM HAREM HAREM HAREM HAREM HAREM HAREM HAREM HAREM HAREM HAREM HAREM HAREM HAREM HAREM HAREM HAREM HAREM HAREM HAREM HAREM HAREM HAREM HAREM HAREM HAREM HAREM HAREM HAREM HAREM HAREM HAREM HAREM HAREM HAREM HAREM HAREM HAREM HAREM.......
Lanjut terus cerita nya jangan sampai berhenti di tengah jalan seperti novel kebanyakan di webnovel dan jaga kesehatan author ......, .......
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This mtl is already in the webnovel, although incomplete. earl, aunt and kaido? Have you even reviewed this? the previous one at least translated the names correctly. The story itself is good, but this translation leaves something to be desired.
I really love the story. I really recommend it. and I really recommend that you review the work for we can get another chapter.
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Character had potential to be top tier one piece fanfic OC but the author wants to make this story a fanservice pedo loli Pokémon catch ‘em all fanfic harem. The MC talks about trust and no betrayal yet manipulating little girls into joining his harem and grooming them. These authors needs a background check because this some criminal activity being allowed on the platform.
es entretenida, nada muy especial, decae en algunos capítulos a la hora de formar relaciones, el mc es un poco irritante pero me gustó su personalidad
Me gustó la historia sinceramente es entretenido de leer pero.................Este MC está demasiado obsesionado con las sirvientas y sinceramente el último capítulo me decepcionó mucho...... Quiero decir leí esperando como haría Kahn para conseguir que Kuina se uniera a el y en la primera vez que se ven le dice "Oye niña quieres ser mí sirvienta? "...... realmente me pareció lo más patético que leí en mí vida.
I've only read the story up to chapter 12 and I'm really disappointed. Up to this point we only tell what happens in the story and almost never show anything of the story. This makes the story very tiring for me because even entertainment is simply left out with the words “they are talking”. Nico Robin is raised by the MC to be a slave who cleans and fights for him. Your love for archiology is completely removed. He frees Boa Hancock and her sisters in order to enslave them himself. I find this more than a little disturbing and should actually bring out negative emotions in Hancock and her sisters. Far too much time is spent on unimportant information and instead content is simply left out.
Love the book. Hey there is a writer named “bamberg” who is copying your story. Did you allowed him to?
Holy ----------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------
I love this fanfic!! I read this and the one on the MTL and it's not finish I got stop when he successfully copy the Nika fruit. Can anyone recommend me fanfic story like this one?? I would love if it has harem!
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Pokemon harem BS, there's no substance in the story and a whole bunch of creeps in the comments.
The story is years before canon so you can expect a lot of changes from the original, the love interests are loli versions of the most popular girls, the translation is pretty poor so good luck with that, the main character is your typical cocky Chinese guy, there's no system so points for that. The story isn't that great but it's good for passing the time.
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Add to the Harem: Nico Robin, Boa Hancock, Nami, Nojiko, Viola, Rebecca, Shirahoshi, Shyarly, Baby-5, Monet, Yamato, Uta, Vivi, Baccarat, Carina, Smoothie, Hiyori, Reiju, Carrot, Sadi....... HAREM HAREM HAREM HAREM HAREM HAREM HAREM HAREM HAREM HAREM HAREM HAREM HAREM HAREM HAREM HAREM HAREM HAREM HAREM HAREM HAREM HAREM HAREM HAREM HAREM HAREM HAREM HAREM HAREM HAREM HAREM HAREM HAREM HAREM HAREM HAREM HAREM HAREM HAREM HAREM HAREM HAREM HAREM HAREM HAREM HAREM HAREM HAREM HAREM HAREM HAREM HAREM HAREM HAREM HAREM HAREM HAREM HAREM HAREM HAREM HAREM HAREM HAREM HAREM HAREM HAREM HAREM HAREM HAREM HAREM HAREM HAREM HAREM HAREM HAREM HAREM HAREM HAREM.......
Lanjut terus cerita nya jangan sampai berhenti di tengah jalan seperti novel kebanyakan di webnovel dan jaga kesehatan author ......, .......
Spoiler de révélation [img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update]
This mtl is already in the webnovel, although incomplete. earl, aunt and kaido? Have you even reviewed this? the previous one at least translated the names correctly. The story itself is good, but this translation leaves something to be desired.
I really love the story. I really recommend it. and I really recommend that you review the work for we can get another chapter.
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