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I like this a lot between the MC's power and the character interactions they are both great. The grammar and writing is also pretty good with very few mistakes. I'd recommend this and I'm looking to see more!
the history is interenting. for now i see a good future to the novel. i think the way of the plot has been set, is very refreshing, no give such importans to the main characters of DxD for now. only show us, the mc and his interactions, with his power and his new reality. i expect good thinks of this, dont droop this author.
The story is decent with good writing and grammar ,mc is also normal unlike most of the mc in dxd fic who act like a bunch of horn dogs.while the stuff with oc's is getting a but boring its not too bad The only problem i found is how you dealt with mc's first encounter with rias it felt like it was done just for plot convenienvce with no thoughts given into it whatsoever, she is supposed to be the sole heir of gremory family and is only 14 or so during this timeline yet she was roaming alone with akeno in human realm( specifically in mc's town)looking for manga with no bodyguard ?she can just order them in her home why bother getting attacked and risking lives of civilians alongside and also she or akeno had no remorse for causing so many deaths due to their negleigence this was very much out of character.
Sigue escribiendolo me encanta piensa como yo el personaje y eso me encanta asi q sigue escribiendolo q tienes talento y espero q no te demores en sacar un nuevo capítulo
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Interestimg and mysterious power, good pacing and excellent grammar. I also like the characters who feel realistic and not 1 dimensional.
I like this a lot between the MC's power and the character interactions they are both great. The grammar and writing is also pretty good with very few mistakes. I'd recommend this and I'm looking to see more!
the history is interenting. for now i see a good future to the novel. i think the way of the plot has been set, is very refreshing, no give such importans to the main characters of DxD for now. only show us, the mc and his interactions, with his power and his new reality. i expect good thinks of this, dont droop this author.
The story is decent with good writing and grammar ,mc is also normal unlike most of the mc in dxd fic who act like a bunch of horn dogs.while the stuff with oc's is getting a but boring its not too bad The only problem i found is how you dealt with mc's first encounter with rias it felt like it was done just for plot convenienvce with no thoughts given into it whatsoever, she is supposed to be the sole heir of gremory family and is only 14 or so during this timeline yet she was roaming alone with akeno in human realm( specifically in mc's town)looking for manga with no bodyguard ?she can just order them in her home why bother getting attacked and risking lives of civilians alongside and also she or akeno had no remorse for causing so many deaths due to their negleigence this was very much out of character.
Sigue escribiendolo me encanta piensa como yo el personaje y eso me encanta asi q sigue escribiendolo q tienes talento y espero q no te demores en sacar un nuevo capítulo
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Interestimg and mysterious power, good pacing and excellent grammar. I also like the characters who feel realistic and not 1 dimensional.