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I really liked this piece to keep it that way. Otherwise, there is nothing so good to read lately.[img=recommend] But what if I don't want to write a 140-character review? Maybe I want to write to the author : Keep it up, I really like your fan fiction. And how are these trunks counted? Are spaces taken into account? And if my reasoning does not relate to fanfiction, does it violate any rules and will my comment be fired?
Unfortunately the mc is more childish in this version instead of how you would expect a grown man in a kids body to react like the original. It always disappoint me as a man when I read another grown man being shy. I honestly don’t understand how any reader who’s been threw life can accept this unless your a weird, reclusive shut in. It’s almost the same thing in each Naruto fan fic, where the mc meets someone for the first time and all of a sudden feels the needs to protect them, it’s infuriating. When in reality or at least in my reality I would give that person advice about not taking not shit and keep it moving
All in all it is written well however with the rewrite happening (or it could’ve been like this originally, I forgot if I read this already) the name of the system, the synopsis, and title needs to be changed. This is because what the system gives the mc is eye abilities not eyes (this is a good way to minimize strength gains and such stuff without nerfing but now you changed what this novel was originally). Personally I feel disappointed with that but not by much. But otherwise it is fine.
Well, in my opinion, this is a very good story to pass the time. It's not a masterpiece, but if you're looking for a sort of slice-of-life story with a touch of action here and there, this is perfect for that. The author usually updates the story pretty quickly, which I respect. Without giving too many spoilers, it’s a typical reincarnation story, but wait, that doesn’t mean it’s bad. Again, it’s a decent story, perfect for passing the time and having fun reading it. I recommend it if you’re looking for something light to read.
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I really liked this piece to keep it that way. Otherwise, there is nothing so good to read lately.[img=recommend] But what if I don't want to write a 140-character review? Maybe I want to write to the author : Keep it up, I really like your fan fiction. And how are these trunks counted? Are spaces taken into account? And if my reasoning does not relate to fanfiction, does it violate any rules and will my comment be fired?
Unfortunately the mc is more childish in this version instead of how you would expect a grown man in a kids body to react like the original. It always disappoint me as a man when I read another grown man being shy. I honestly don’t understand how any reader who’s been threw life can accept this unless your a weird, reclusive shut in. It’s almost the same thing in each Naruto fan fic, where the mc meets someone for the first time and all of a sudden feels the needs to protect them, it’s infuriating. When in reality or at least in my reality I would give that person advice about not taking not shit and keep it moving
All in all it is written well however with the rewrite happening (or it could’ve been like this originally, I forgot if I read this already) the name of the system, the synopsis, and title needs to be changed. This is because what the system gives the mc is eye abilities not eyes (this is a good way to minimize strength gains and such stuff without nerfing but now you changed what this novel was originally). Personally I feel disappointed with that but not by much. But otherwise it is fine.
Well, in my opinion, this is a very good story to pass the time. It's not a masterpiece, but if you're looking for a sort of slice-of-life story with a touch of action here and there, this is perfect for that. The author usually updates the story pretty quickly, which I respect. Without giving too many spoilers, it’s a typical reincarnation story, but wait, that doesn’t mean it’s bad. Again, it’s a decent story, perfect for passing the time and having fun reading it. I recommend it if you’re looking for something light to read.
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