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Hey! I hope you’re doing well. I just wanted to say how much I admire your amazing writing talent—your story really left an impression on me, and I’d love to chat with you about it. I’m a commission-based digital artist and have worked on comics with authors across different platforms. I genuinely think your story would make a fantastic comic! You can also check out my work on DeviantArt under the name VanessaWick Feel free to reach out to me on Discord: losserishere Or on Twitter: @tirtatare
I loved this book so far i have always loved fanfics of the originals of course i love the originals aswell but fanfics always have held a precious place in my heart
good premise for a story sadly im already tired of the chinese phrasing it soo annoying TOOO MUCH CHING CHONG!
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a-Translation very bad.b-1 chapters per day.c-one of the best story development.d-Just need some side character's story.e-world background is just btth.
The translation is good with no grammar mistakes, except for the cultivation ranks and various locations. The translator always got them wrong.. The story itself is also not so good, as the author although got an interesting system concept but executed it probably. Many times I find myself bored to death or cursing the author for making mistakes on the plot.
Main problem is translation. It kinda varies, from barely readable to bad-mtl level, and considering that it is just that, and mtl that is not even properly proofread, I shouldn't expect too much. Honestly, if that was just tidied up a bit, some grammar here and there, names and cultivation levels, things like that, it would be more or less readable. The plot itself is not original and it is quite predictable. We get typical OP MC who gets everything he wants (if Xiao Yan needs something that MC wants/need then MC gets something better so Xiao Yan can still exist in the background... but here his existance makes some sense with the nature of the system). The system itself makes less sense to me with each story arc, as we get some 'rules' on which it operates, but it still feels too off to me as those rewards sometimes make no sense (like how devouring souls suddenly coincide with being able to see the whole continent from above? And how no one felt power capable of something like that?). Beyond that there is typical harem that gets basically all girls that Xiao Yan would get and then some (at least I think 'then some' from how story gets, but he at least gets Xiao Yan's girls). Basically no struggle for his powers, especially in later chapters, problems that should stump him for at least are just opportunity to show off... overall typical Chinese MC + Cultivation + Reincarnation + Golden Finger combo. Not that bad that you wouldn't be able to read it, but I can't recommend when you had more than 3 hours of sleep or just trying to wait for sleeping pills to finally completely kick in.
Good fanfic so far. But is it so hard to not f up the names for the cultivation levels? They get mixed way to much.
It's great writing story devolepment has a good pace. Just one complaint for some reason all previous chapters were erased.
So far, I like this novel. Keep up the good work. And continue to update regularly.
It’s really good no complaints yet. Keep it up[img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend]
I just want to know are you going to put romance and harem or are you just going to have mc drag the girls on for along time and then just leave or something
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Translation is basic mtl with extreme confusion especially for the ranks and genders. Even names are flat out wrong at worst and changing at best. However if you can stomach a bad translation with changing names etc then the story is decent for reading to fill in the time
Hey! I hope you’re doing well. I just wanted to say how much I admire your amazing writing talent—your story really left an impression on me, and I’d love to chat with you about it. I’m a commission-based digital artist and have worked on comics with authors across different platforms. I genuinely think your story would make a fantastic comic! You can also check out my work on DeviantArt under the name VanessaWick Feel free to reach out to me on Discord: losserishere Or on Twitter: @tirtatare
I loved this book so far i have always loved fanfics of the originals of course i love the originals aswell but fanfics always have held a precious place in my heart
good premise for a story sadly im already tired of the chinese phrasing it soo annoying TOOO MUCH CHING CHONG!
Raw's name????¿????????????????????????¿????????????????????????¿????????????????????????¿????????????????????????¿????????????????????????¿????????????????????????¿??????????????????????
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a-Translation very bad.b-1 chapters per day.c-one of the best story development.d-Just need some side character's story.e-world background is just btth.
The translation is good with no grammar mistakes, except for the cultivation ranks and various locations. The translator always got them wrong.. The story itself is also not so good, as the author although got an interesting system concept but executed it probably. Many times I find myself bored to death or cursing the author for making mistakes on the plot.
Main problem is translation. It kinda varies, from barely readable to bad-mtl level, and considering that it is just that, and mtl that is not even properly proofread, I shouldn't expect too much. Honestly, if that was just tidied up a bit, some grammar here and there, names and cultivation levels, things like that, it would be more or less readable. The plot itself is not original and it is quite predictable. We get typical OP MC who gets everything he wants (if Xiao Yan needs something that MC wants/need then MC gets something better so Xiao Yan can still exist in the background... but here his existance makes some sense with the nature of the system). The system itself makes less sense to me with each story arc, as we get some 'rules' on which it operates, but it still feels too off to me as those rewards sometimes make no sense (like how devouring souls suddenly coincide with being able to see the whole continent from above? And how no one felt power capable of something like that?). Beyond that there is typical harem that gets basically all girls that Xiao Yan would get and then some (at least I think 'then some' from how story gets, but he at least gets Xiao Yan's girls). Basically no struggle for his powers, especially in later chapters, problems that should stump him for at least are just opportunity to show off... overall typical Chinese MC + Cultivation + Reincarnation + Golden Finger combo. Not that bad that you wouldn't be able to read it, but I can't recommend when you had more than 3 hours of sleep or just trying to wait for sleeping pills to finally completely kick in.
Good fanfic so far. But is it so hard to not f up the names for the cultivation levels? They get mixed way to much.
It's great writing story devolepment has a good pace. Just one complaint for some reason all previous chapters were erased.
So far, I like this novel. Keep up the good work. And continue to update regularly.
It’s really good no complaints yet. Keep it up[img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend]
I just want to know are you going to put romance and harem or are you just going to have mc drag the girls on for along time and then just leave or something
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Translation is basic mtl with extreme confusion especially for the ranks and genders. Even names are flat out wrong at worst and changing at best. However if you can stomach a bad translation with changing names etc then the story is decent for reading to fill in the time