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A novel with high potential, 2 chapters and you will see how good the execution of the authors towards the person with god power.
My main issue with the story is the fact that he has Sentry's abilities but the void is nowhere to be found. Combine that with the actual abilities of the Sentry in MHA, he has no opponents
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eu gostei um pouco da personalidade do protagonista ate ele fazer erros óbvios como revelar a capacidade de criar e curar, era óbvio que o AFO iria atrás dele.Também não gostei do gosto do autor e do protagonista, ambos são Furry, acho que isso foi o que mais me encomodou, foi como ver alguém beijando um raposa bípede, simplesmente asqueroso.tambem achei o protagonista poderoso demais, ou o autor vai fazer um nerf absurdo ou vai inventar um pretexto qualquer (provavelmente algo absurdo) para colocar um inimigo a altura, bom se isso acontecer eu não vou ta aqui pra ver.
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Sentry in MHA. That is something else. Good work. Hope that you will not drop this story.
Satus_Null Keep up the good work Can you please do this Mha fanfiction idea right now MHA Harem A Mha fan named Charlie is upset with how izuku midoriya behaved at the start of mha and he was also sympathizing and agreeing with all for one’s plan of tearing down the current hero society and making something better out of the ashes.So He thinks that if he was to be reincarnated it would be as izuku midoriya it would be a 7 months before canon. Unbeknownst to him that would be his last night in his previous world. Harem Inko Midoriya Mitsuki Bakugo Yu Takeyama Nemuri Kayama Tsuyu Asui Momo Yaoyorozu Mina Ashido Kinoko Komori Pony Tsunotori Fuyumi Todoroki Rei Todoroki Uwabami Himiko Toga Shino Sōsaki Ryūko Tsuchikawa
It's Good............. .................... ..... .................................................................... .. ... ................... ... Give it a try
Grammar seems alright for a translation fic, character is too op, you literally wrote yourself into a corner with that nonsense. He has literally all the power in the world, multiverse level, and yet he’s ALMOST following the canon path. He saves Kota’s parents, helps out midoriya by making him smarter, which is fine, but what is the point when you are essentially a god? From the beginning you could’ve already destroyed the villains yourself and changed everything the way you wanted. You talk about changing society’s way but do nothing about it, also your character for some reason likes to act indifferent and edgy to the other characters for no reason, and then you have him killing the villains that pop up at his house. Then you make a clone to portray the role of a villain with no explanation, there’s so many plot holes stacked up on top of each other, it blows my mind. There are villains that have apparently attacked mc several times and they all die, but you have him nerf himself in the fight with muscular for what???? TLDR: Annoyingly OP, still mostly follows canon when the character can literally one shot everything from the beginning. No context in regards to the story progression and ZERO character development, also babysits midoriya for some reason? Nothing makes sense when your character is a multiverse level threat, so anything you write is already obsolete.
The story is good so far, I don’t really have anything to complain about. The mc doesn’t seem to be a huge hero fan so he won’t just change the future to make the world better. He will let the trouble come to him. So the story will most likely follow canon. He is accurate with the strength of sentry so if you think you are getting a watered down version then you are mistaken. The writing quality and the chapter length are both great and long which is nice. The only problem I have is after ch7 the author said he will be going on a hiatus. I don’t exactly know what that means. A month? A week? A couple of days? A year? Story is dropped? Idk, but I hope the material comes back soon.
It is a good fanfic that is somewhat different from the others because the destiny of the protagonist of Mha changed and the story apparently is going to take a different direction, that is the good thing about it: it has creativity.
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I like it! ......................................................................................................................................................................................................
It's just the author giving his assessment of the story. I want you guys to do the same, I'll strive to update the chapters as soon as possible. And don't forget to leave your opinion at the end of the chapters! :D
A novel with high potential, 2 chapters and you will see how good the execution of the authors towards the person with god power.
My main issue with the story is the fact that he has Sentry's abilities but the void is nowhere to be found. Combine that with the actual abilities of the Sentry in MHA, he has no opponents
Spoiler de révélation eu gostei um pouco da personalidade do protagonista ate ele fazer erros óbvios como revelar a capacidade de criar e curar, era óbvio que o AFO iria atrás dele.Também não gostei do gosto do autor e do protagonista, ambos são Furry, acho que isso foi o que mais me encomodou, foi como ver alguém beijando um raposa bípede, simplesmente asqueroso.tambem achei o protagonista poderoso demais, ou o autor vai fazer um nerf absurdo ou vai inventar um pretexto qualquer (provavelmente algo absurdo) para colocar um inimigo a altura, bom se isso acontecer eu não vou ta aqui pra ver.
Spoiler de révélation Sentry in MHA. That is something else. Good work. Hope that you will not drop this story.
Satus_Null Keep up the good work Can you please do this Mha fanfiction idea right now MHA Harem A Mha fan named Charlie is upset with how izuku midoriya behaved at the start of mha and he was also sympathizing and agreeing with all for one’s plan of tearing down the current hero society and making something better out of the ashes.So He thinks that if he was to be reincarnated it would be as izuku midoriya it would be a 7 months before canon. Unbeknownst to him that would be his last night in his previous world. Harem Inko Midoriya Mitsuki Bakugo Yu Takeyama Nemuri Kayama Tsuyu Asui Momo Yaoyorozu Mina Ashido Kinoko Komori Pony Tsunotori Fuyumi Todoroki Rei Todoroki Uwabami Himiko Toga Shino Sōsaki Ryūko Tsuchikawa
It's Good............. .................... ..... .................................................................... .. ... ................... ... Give it a try
Grammar seems alright for a translation fic, character is too op, you literally wrote yourself into a corner with that nonsense. He has literally all the power in the world, multiverse level, and yet he’s ALMOST following the canon path. He saves Kota’s parents, helps out midoriya by making him smarter, which is fine, but what is the point when you are essentially a god? From the beginning you could’ve already destroyed the villains yourself and changed everything the way you wanted. You talk about changing society’s way but do nothing about it, also your character for some reason likes to act indifferent and edgy to the other characters for no reason, and then you have him killing the villains that pop up at his house. Then you make a clone to portray the role of a villain with no explanation, there’s so many plot holes stacked up on top of each other, it blows my mind. There are villains that have apparently attacked mc several times and they all die, but you have him nerf himself in the fight with muscular for what???? TLDR: Annoyingly OP, still mostly follows canon when the character can literally one shot everything from the beginning. No context in regards to the story progression and ZERO character development, also babysits midoriya for some reason? Nothing makes sense when your character is a multiverse level threat, so anything you write is already obsolete.
The story is good so far, I don’t really have anything to complain about. The mc doesn’t seem to be a huge hero fan so he won’t just change the future to make the world better. He will let the trouble come to him. So the story will most likely follow canon. He is accurate with the strength of sentry so if you think you are getting a watered down version then you are mistaken. The writing quality and the chapter length are both great and long which is nice. The only problem I have is after ch7 the author said he will be going on a hiatus. I don’t exactly know what that means. A month? A week? A couple of days? A year? Story is dropped? Idk, but I hope the material comes back soon.
It is a good fanfic that is somewhat different from the others because the destiny of the protagonist of Mha changed and the story apparently is going to take a different direction, that is the good thing about it: it has creativity.
Spoiler de révélation I like it! ......................................................................................................................................................................................................
It's just the author giving his assessment of the story. I want you guys to do the same, I'll strive to update the chapters as soon as possible. And don't forget to leave your opinion at the end of the chapters! :D