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There are a lot of areas that needed improvement. Overall a good story. Could have added more elements to Ten shadows technique, like new abilities discovered or something. Though the combination of nue and rabbit was very good. Maybe a way to recover dead shadows would be a great addition
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You know instead of transmigrating as Megumi Fushiguro you should have been reincarnated in one of the zenin’s with 10 shadow technique with decent curse energy than becomes stronger for that juicy character development and I know there can only be one 10 shadow user and would be funny to throw The jjk universe upside down. ………………..Just a review…………..
Good, like it, don't want to make a full review but love this novel. I want MOAR. Keep up da good work. They don't let me post that why? I think its because I can now
I give it 5 stars, because i like it. This Megumi has his pride and ambition, that canon Megumi didnt. Also i can see, that author remember about curse energy theory. And for the future: please, dont forget about such interesting CE ways as shikigami and self pacts. realy want to see them.
lovely ignore now I am not able to arrive on the way to the students to submit the form of the day of the day of the day of the day of the day of
This feels very forced. Start off well, but you had to look for love interests so soon and so hastily. It all felt very unorganic. His maid contributes nothing when she speaks. I recommend you keep her quiet. Treat the filler characters for what they are. Don't try to give them value if you are going to discard them early.
As a new writer, I wanted to write about Megumi's wasted potential in JJK through this fanfic. I want to showcase what he could become with the right mindset and if he didn't instantly default to spamming Mahoraga. I welcome any constructive criticism as I will try improve as a fanfic writer. Me when I actually see any criticism:
There are a lot of areas that needed improvement. Overall a good story. Could have added more elements to Ten shadows technique, like new abilities discovered or something. Though the combination of nue and rabbit was very good. Maybe a way to recover dead shadows would be a great addition
Spoiler de révélation You know instead of transmigrating as Megumi Fushiguro you should have been reincarnated in one of the zenin’s with 10 shadow technique with decent curse energy than becomes stronger for that juicy character development and I know there can only be one 10 shadow user and would be funny to throw The jjk universe upside down. ………………..Just a review…………..
Good, like it, don't want to make a full review but love this novel. I want MOAR. Keep up da good work. They don't let me post that why? I think its because I can now
I give it 5 stars, because i like it. This Megumi has his pride and ambition, that canon Megumi didnt. Also i can see, that author remember about curse energy theory. And for the future: please, dont forget about such interesting CE ways as shikigami and self pacts. realy want to see them.
lovely ignore now I am not able to arrive on the way to the students to submit the form of the day of the day of the day of the day of the day of
This feels very forced. Start off well, but you had to look for love interests so soon and so hastily. It all felt very unorganic. His maid contributes nothing when she speaks. I recommend you keep her quiet. Treat the filler characters for what they are. Don't try to give them value if you are going to discard them early.
As a new writer, I wanted to write about Megumi's wasted potential in JJK through this fanfic. I want to showcase what he could become with the right mindset and if he didn't instantly default to spamming Mahoraga. I welcome any constructive criticism as I will try improve as a fanfic writer. Me when I actually see any criticism: