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.. all messed up story line and events ... skirt chasing MC or "bust chasing " ... wrong choices for the perks .. and even the good one is useless Infront of his aunt .. Garbage 🗑️ 🗑️ 🗑️
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continue what you have been doing. So, i give you 5 star Faster Updates Faster Updates Faster Updates Faster Updates Faster Updates Faster Updates
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Notice- I am really sorry that I had to delete my work yesterday for some reason. But don't worry I will post all the chapters which I had published before and continue this work.
Yeah okay this is pretty cringe..MC act super unnatural, and very odd. He clearly can't keep a conversation with anyone if he talks like that. The library of heaven's path which i was looking forward to was used in an incredibly boring way. Overall, the MC is trash. And not the good kind. The story seems to be him just chasing chicks, which might fit some people. I was hoping for more. You need to work on how to write both descriptive text and most importantly dialogue. It just doesn't flow well anywhere and nobody talks like actual people.
.. all messed up story line and events ... skirt chasing MC or "bust chasing " ... wrong choices for the perks .. and even the good one is useless Infront of his aunt .. Garbage 🗑️ 🗑️ 🗑️
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continue what you have been doing. So, i give you 5 star Faster Updates Faster Updates Faster Updates Faster Updates Faster Updates Faster Updates
Thanks thanks thanks thanks thanks thanks thanks thanks thanks thanks thanks thanks thanks thanks thanks thanks thanks thanks thanks thanks thanks thanks thanks thanks thanks
Notice- I am really sorry that I had to delete my work yesterday for some reason. But don't worry I will post all the chapters which I had published before and continue this work.
Yeah okay this is pretty cringe..MC act super unnatural, and very odd. He clearly can't keep a conversation with anyone if he talks like that. The library of heaven's path which i was looking forward to was used in an incredibly boring way. Overall, the MC is trash. And not the good kind. The story seems to be him just chasing chicks, which might fit some people. I was hoping for more. You need to work on how to write both descriptive text and most importantly dialogue. It just doesn't flow well anywhere and nobody talks like actual people.